Please help me proof

Re: Please help me proof

• ConcertinaPress member

  

  May 2011

  I think that sounds beautiful!

  
  

  What about "we pledge our faith, our love and our lives" ? I think it also sounds nice the way you have it though so maybe someone else will weigh in.

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• shortee426 member

  

  May 2011

  The invitation should be written in the third person, not first.  

  The year doesn't need to be capitilized.  

  I believe you don't need the "at" before the time. 

  "in the morning" is not necessary, although there is nothing wrong with it if you like the flow of it.

  
  

  
  

  
  
  

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• vicki0508 member

  

  May 2011

  Ditto shortee.
  
  I would also consider using a non script font for most of the text, and leaving your names in script.  All of the script makes it kind of difficult to read.
  

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• staceyd100 member

  

  May 2011

  Thaks everyone! I will make the edits and I am so glad i asked for help!
  
  Thanks again

  

  My Bio*updated 5.19.11*

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• Santorini2011 member

  

  May 2011

  I think Two should be lowercase but double check that

  

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