Ceremony script critique
I sat down last night and did a draft of my ceremony script. The wedding isn't until July so I have some time, but I will feel good knowing that this part is taken care of. A close friend of ours will be officiating, and she will say whatever we want. Mutuality and love without the syrupy-sweet fairy tale trope are kind of our guiding forces.
Some is my own original writing and some is adapted from other ceremony scripts I found online. What do you all think?
Officiant down the aisle
Groomsmen down the aisle
GROOM + parents down the aisle
Bridesfolk down the aisle
BRIDE + parents down the aisle
Officiant: Family, friends, and fellow travelers on the path of life: welcome! We are gathered here today to celebrate one of life’s greatest moments, and to cherish the words which shall unite GROOM and BRIDE in marriage.
Marriage is the promise between two people who love each other, who trust in that love, who honor one another as individuals, and who have decided to spend the rest of their lives together.
This ceremony will not create a relationship that does not already exist between you. It is a representation of how far you have come in the past five years. It is symbolic of the promises you will make to each other to continue growing stronger as individuals and as partners throughout the years ahead.
Today, your lives, which began on separate paths, will be joined as one. The nature of this coming together is expressed in the poem Union by Robert Fulghum.
“You have known each other from the first glance of acquaintance to this point of commitment. At some point, you decided to marry. From that moment of yes, to this moment of yes, indeed, you have been making commitments in an informal way. All of those conversations that were held in a car, or over a meal, or during long walks – all those conversations that began with, “When we’re married”, and continued with “I will” and “you will” and “we will” – all those late night talks that included “someday” and “somehow” and “maybe” – and all those promises that are unspoken matters of the heart. All these common things, and more, are the real process of a wedding.
The symbolic vows that you are about to make are a way of saying to one another, “You know all those things that we’ve promised, and hoped, and dreamed – well, I meant it all, every word.”
Look at one another and remember this moment in time. Before this moment you have been many things to one another – acquaintance, friend, companion, lover, dancing partner, even teacher, for you have learned much from one another these past few years. Shortly you shall say a few words that will take you across a threshold of life, and things between you will never quite be the same.
For after today you shall say to the world –
This is my husband. This is my wife.”
With this in mind, we proceed to the declaration of intent.
Do you, GROOM, take BRIDE to be your wife, offering her your love and encouragement, your trust and respect, as together you create your collective future?
GROOM: I DO
Officiant: Do you, BRIDE, take GROOM to be your husband, offering him your love and encouragement, your trust and respect, as together you create your collective future?
BRIDE: I DO
Officiant: The couple has prepared vows to seal the occasion
GROOM: GROOM VOWS (with this ring…)
BRIDE: BRIDE VOWS (with this ring…)
Officiant: GROOM and BRIDE, you have expressed your love to one another through the commitments and promises you have just made. It is with these in mind, and by the power vested in me by the state of Minnesota, that I now pronounce you husband and wife.
You have kissed a thousand times, maybe more. But today the feeling is new. You are no longer simply partners and best friends. I invite you now to share your first kiss as husband and wife.
Before we close today, we will look back on an old German tradition. In Bavaria, it was customary for the bride and groom to conclude their wedding ceremony by jointly sawing a log in half. The log symbolizes the first challenge they must confront together in their marriage. Neither spouse can wield the saw alone; it is only together that they can accomplish the task at hand. Will you bring in the log [2 wedding party members carry log on sawhorse, one additional carries saw]. GROOM, hold this end of the saw. Use it with the full force of your being, giving and receiving in equal measure. BRIDE, hold this end of the saw. Use it with the full force of your being, giving and receiving in equal measure. [we saw the log.]
Their work is done, and my work is also at an end. I now present to you for the first time, Mr. and Mrs. GROOM and BRIDE!
Anything you think should be changed/adapted/added/deleted?