Proof-reading!

tophexie

Hi all,

I've been working on the wording for our invitations and would like to get some fresh eyes on it! Would anyone be willing to proof read for me ?


EDITed with invitation! TY in advance!

 

Mr. & Mrs. John Smith

 

and

 

Mr. & Mrs. John Smith

 

request the honour of your presence at the marriage uniting their children

Jane Smith

 

&

 

John Smith

 

as they begin their new life together on Saturday,

 

the first of June two thousand thirteen

 

at  two o’clock in the afternoon

CHURCH

Street Address | City, State

 

 

tophexie

In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_proof-reading?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:9e36e3ba-a0f8-4814-806c-5308cf17426aPost:641d6731-c81a-483d-81ce-5f7175ba8db2">Re: Proof-reading!</a>:
[QUOTE]Sure!  You can copy and paste it into here.  Just change the last names and venue name/address.
Posted by Edie Bee[/QUOTE]

done! ty!

JanoBean75

Mr. & Mrs. John Smith

 Mr. & Mrs. John Smith

 request the honour of your presence

at the marriage uniting their children

Jane Smith

 

&

 

John Smith

 

Saturday,  the first of June

two thousand thirteen

 at  two o’clock in the afternoon

CHURCH

Street Address | City, State

tophexie

In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_proof-reading?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:9e36e3ba-a0f8-4814-806c-5308cf17426aPost:8078d6cb-8570-4105-9b9e-277d183440bf">Re: Proof-reading!</a>:
[QUOTE]Mr. & Mrs. John Smith  Mr. & Mrs. John Smith  request the honour of your presence at the marriage uniting their children Jane Smith   &   John Smith   Saturday,  the first of June two thousand thirteen  at   two o’clock in the afternoon CHURCH Street Address | City, State
Posted by JanoBean75[/QUOTE]


what would think if inbetween the parents name I do "together with"