July 2011 Weddings

Can you proof read this for me?

Can one of you ladies read this over and let me know if I need to make changes?  TIA

This day I will marry my best friend, the one I laugh with, live for, and love.

 

Mr. and Mrs. Bride's Parents

request the honor of your presence at the marriage of their daughter,

Bride's Name

to

Groom's Name

 Son of Mr. and Mrs. Groom's Parents and Mr. and Mrs. Groom's Parents

on Saturday, the Thirtieth of July, Two Thousand and Eleven

at Four O’clock in the Afternoon.


Here is what the actual invite will look like:



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Re: Can you proof read this for me?

  • edited November 2010
    Son should be son
    Thirtieth should be thirtieth
    Two Thousand and Eleven should be two thousand eleven
    Four O'clock should be four o'clock
    Afternoon should be afternoon
    No period after "love" and "afternoon"
    No comma is necessary after "daughter"

    Also, I prefer that the "to" between your names be in block print instead of the script that your names are in so that your names stand out even more.  And I'd make the block print larger so that it's easier to read in general.
    image 182 Invited
    image 0 Are ready to party!
    image 0 Will be missing the fun
    image 0 Can't find the mailbox...

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  • changes made.  Thank you!
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  • In Response to Re: Can you proof read this for me?:
    Son should be son Thirtieth should be thirtieth Two Thousand and Eleven should be two thousand eleven Four O'clock should be four o'clock Afternoon should be afternoon No period after "love" and "afternoon" No comma is necessary after "daughter" Also, I prefer that the "to" between your names be in block print instead of the script that your names are in so that your names stand out even more.  And I'd make the block print larger so that it's easier to read in general.
    Posted by peaches85
    Peaches, you are the invite queen!
  • In Response to Re: Can you proof read this for me?:
    In Response to Re: Can you proof read this for me? : Peaches, you are the invite queen!
    Posted by beautifulbridetobe11
    Lol!  At least my English degree is being put to good use in some way! 
    image 182 Invited
    image 0 Are ready to party!
    image 0 Will be missing the fun
    image 0 Can't find the mailbox...

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