Too long?

ashynich

I need to know if my vows are too long.... and any advice,  critiques, etc.

Damian, I'm not going to tell you I love you, because I say that everyday,

I say that a million times everyday, and it drives you crazy.

I'm not going to tell you I'll always be here, because you know that,

I'm always here, everyday, and you will always know that.

I'm not going to tell you how handsome you are, because I say that everyday,

and you roll your eyes at me every time.

I'm not going to promise to keep the house clean, be both know i'm trying,

we both know i'm not a good housewife.

I'm not going to promise our life together is going to be perfec.

What I am going to say is that I care more about you than i ever have about any

human being, i care more about you than I care about myself.

What I'm going to say is that you are the more caring, intelligent man I have ever met.

What i'm going to say is I will continue to try to be a good housewife,

and I'm not perfect, but I know you love me, and someday I will keep the sink empty and the toilet bowls shiny.

What I'm going to say is our life together is going to be the most exciting thing that has ever happened to us. There is never a dull moment with me around, you know that already. So buckle your seatbelt, and hang on!

What I am going to say is that you are the most amazing thing that has ever

happened to me. You have helped me grow up, you have made me into a woman.

I never thought we'd get here, I mean I knew it in my heart we would be married,

someday, but this was a long and winding road, and now we're finally here.

And it's beautiful, this is the most amazing day of my life. 

And I could not be happier that it is happening, 

in just a few seconds, I will be your wife. 

I am a libra, I'm supposed to be well balanced. And I wasn't balanced before I met you,

you help balance me out. Without you, I'd topple over,

well sometimes I do topple over, but when i do you're there to catch me.

And I know you'll always be there, and from this day forward it's official,

I love you Damian H, with all of my heart. 

Mal8423

Yeah, definitely. I would be more straight to the point, and tell him what you want to tell him, rather than say all the things you don't want to say, ya know? Skip the libra stuff, skip the housewife comments, if anything, find something traditional and put a spin on it. Many people have also included "alternative" or "funny" vows, making promises to leave the toilet seat down for his wife, while she promises to leave it up for him, stuff like that. When you keep it simple and from the heart its more sincere.

nlfeguer

I don't mind the length, but I think I'd cut out lots of the "What I am going to tell you."  Say it once, list a bunch of things, maybe bring us back around with it again halfway through...I just don't think you need it before each part.  And maybe if you bring it back, change it slightly "I do promise..." or something.