Invite wording help

Tygirljojo

Okay, gotten a few bits of feedback on my pseudo invite mockups and one person voiced a wording concern that I'd had.  Currently invites read:

Together with their families

The Seattle Bride Tygirljojo
and
Her Groom Guy

Invite you to
Celebrate

with them as they exchange wedding vows

Saturday, the tenth of July
at four o'clock in the afternoon

Reception Location
1234 Main Street
Countrytown, WA 98765

Reception to follow.

The part I need help with is the "With them as they exchange wedding vows"  The "Invite you to Celebrate" part is part of the invite design and will stay where it is.  Should I re-word the top so it says something like "You are invited to....." and remove the whole "With them as they exchange wedding vows"?  I need to open up some space at the bottom and getting rid of a line would be awesome...but I'm stuck!  I've hit an invite wording wall.  FWIW FI and I are the ones paying for the whole wedding. TIA!

sarack

you know what i think but i'll say it again.

i tihnk it should be:

Together with their families

The Seattle Bride Tygirljojo
and
Her Groom Guy

Invite you to
Celebrate

as they exchange wedding vows <--- the with them doesn't need to be there IMO
Saturday, the tenth of July
at four o'clock in the afternoon

Reception Location
1234 Main Street
Countrytown, WA 98765

Reception to follow

mergator

I would say:

Together with their families

The Seattle Bride Tygirljojo
and
Her Groom Guy

Invite you to
Celebrate

on the occasion of their wedding (or you could say marriage instead of wedding)
Saturday, the tenth of July
at four o'clock in the afternoon

alyssa324

i second what sarack said. I think that flows way better

Tygirljojo

Hmm, how about then:

Invite you to
Celebrate

when they exchange wedding vows

Saturday, the tenth of July
at four o'clock in the afternoon

Tygirljojo

Wait, I just thought of something else due to how that would then read which is great because then I can get rid of a line at the bottom which would help me a ton:

Together with their families

The Seattle Bride Tygirljojo
and
Her Groom Guy


Invite you to
Celebrate


when they exchange marriage vows
Saturday, the tenth of July
at four o'clock in the afternoon

Reception Location
1234 Main Street
Countrytown, WA 98765

Reception to follow.

And is it okay without the year?  I've heard so, but wanted to check concensus.

alyssa324

I still like as they exchange better than when they exchange but I do like marriage vows better than wedding vows

tvgal1971

I like as they exchange better than when, too. 

What about as they exchange their wedding vows?  For some reason it reads better to me.

melissa82

I like "as"

Other options:
"as they join together in marriage"
"as they begin their new life together"

I think I like sarack's best though.

Tygirljojo

Hmm, I guess "as they exchange marriage vows" flows better for the majority then, huh?  Thanks, ladies!