Proof my wording please!

RileysMomma

Invitation wording/layout:

Mr. and Mrs. name & last name

and

Mr. and Mrs. name & last name

invite you to share in the joy of the marriage uniting their children

Chloe Middle & last

and

Justin middle & last

on Friday, the

fourteenth of September

two thousand twelve

at four thirty in the afternoon

ceremony name

address Road

City, CA Zip

 

Reception to follow

RSVP

 

The favor of a reply is requested
by August 24,2012.

M__________________________

  ____Accepts! Can’t Wait!

    ____Declines...so bummed!

 

 

 

Song Request for D.J.

 

   _____________________________

 

J&K10910

I'm not 100% sure on this, but I think you want it to say "the wedding uniting..." not "the marriage."  The marriage refers to the actual uniting, but what you are inviting people is the wedding.

Also, the RSVP wording screams super casual and does not at all go with the invitation wording.

saranandy

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[QUOTE]Also, the RSVP wording screams super casual and does not at all go with the invitation wording.
Posted by J&K10910[/QUOTE]

Agreed. With your invitation wording, I would go with the standard "Accepts with pleasure / Declines with regrets".

RileysMomma

Okay, I will change the RSVP wording. Thanks!

hoffse

It should read:

Mr. and Mrs. First Last Name

Mr. and Mrs. First Last Name

Invite you to share in their joy of the wedding uniting their children

First Middle

and

First Middle

Friday, the fourteenth of September

at half past four in the afternoon ("in the afternoon" is optional)

Ceremony name

Street name spelled out entirely

Ceremony City, California

and then your response card should say

The favor of a reply is requested by the twenty-fourth of August

M_________

____ accepts with pleasure

____ declines with regret

You don't need years.  And you should spell everything out.  Your response cards are waaaaay too casual compared with your invitation.

RileysMomma

Thanks Hoffse- I changed the RSVP back to the formal wording. I also know that listing the year is optional, but I think we will be keeping that.

MrsL2014

another idea that i saw for rvsp is

 ___ready to celebrate

___will celebrate from afar.

I think that will be what i do for my wedding. I got it from pintrest.

Kate61487

ditto hoffse except it should be half after four.  Something about 'past' being associated with death.

RileysMomma

Love that Mrs. L! P.S I am going to Mrs L too :-)

MrsL2014

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[QUOTE]Love that Mrs. L! P.S I am going to Mrs L too :-)
Posted by RileysMomma[/QUOTE]

YAY! I just thought that idea was super cute so I wanted to share :)

MyUserName1

Are you using all those different fonts? It's difficult to read and looks a bit sloppy.  especially the "and" between Chloe and Justin

ootmother2

I would leave out the word "children".  Children cannot marry is the reason for my objection.

hoffse

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[QUOTE]ditto hoffse except it should be half after four.  Something about 'past' being associated with death.
Posted by Kate61487[/QUOTE]

<div>Ah right - I did it without my book in front of me.  Nice catch :)</div>