invite wording advice

golden1215

So I've posted before about how some parents are contributing, some are not and some are still not sure.  We've got 6 months til th wedding but I found some cute ones on vistapoint that I like.

It i okay to just have this as the wording?  The "we" being all encompassing...?

With joyful hearts we ask you to be present at the 
wedding of 
Rebeccah L._____
and

Jason T. _____

Jax Cafe
1928 University Avenue Northeast
Minneapolis, MN

Saturday, September 16th, 2012
3:30 p.m. 

Reception immediately following

tidetravel

If those are your real names, edit the post and take them out.

I'd also take out the location name and address, unless you want crazy lurkers to know when and where you're getting married.

danieliza1127

I prefer the traditional wording of "the pleasure of your company is requested at the wedding of".

ohwhynot

If that is your real personal information, please edit to remove it. 

georgia_bride09

I'm with dani. I'm not digging "with joyful hearts.."

ohwhynot

We didn't really like the "honour of your presence" language (no particularly good reasons, just not our style), so we went with this:

Peggy Ohwhynot
and
Mark Mrohwhynot
invite you to celebrate with us
as we are married on
Saturday, the seventeenth of July
Two thousand ten
at six o'clock in the evening
Certain Community Hall
Address
Cityandstate
Dinner and dancing to follow

We are hosting, but you could put "along with our families" after the names if you like this wording. 

golden1215

danieliza1127- thanks!  I was looking for something along those lines that's ambiguous as to whose hosting.

akhensley81

OP - we have a similar situation where the costs are being split several different ways. Ours simply say... "Bride and Groom, together with their parents, request the honor of your presence....."

ohwhynot

A couple of thoughts, golden - hosting doesn't necessarily = paying.  If all of the parents are hosting, then you may want the invitation to reflect that.  Also, your invitation now say 2012 - is that when you're getting married, or is it 2010?  Finally, I'd remove the venue location from your post, too, just to be on the safe side. 

MOBinFL2008

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[QUOTE]So I've posted before about how some parents are contributing, some are not and some are still not sure.  We've got 6 months til th wedding but I found some cute ones on vistapoint that I like. It i okay to just have this as the wording?  The "we" being all encompassing...? With joyful hearts we ask you to be present at the  wedding of  Rebeccah L._____ and Jason T. _____ Jax Cafe 1928 University Avenue Northeast Minneapolis, MN Saturday, September 18th, 2012 3:30 p.m.  Reception immediately following
Posted by golden1215[/QUOTE]
I'm also not fond of the joyful hearts but if you want to use it, this is what I would put....
With joyful hearts we invite you to be present at the wedding of
Sally Bali
and
Ted Schmed
Saturday, September 18, 2012
half after three

Reception to follow
Venue name
Venue address

I didn't write the full date out since it looks as if you're going for a slightly more casual vibe.  If you truly want formal, I'd suggest the formal wording and writing the full date out.

golden1215

Thanks for the input everyone. 

I do want it to be more formal, so I'll do the full date write out.

No, it's not in 2012- I changed the date to a fake one. 

ThePinkSuperhero

I don't like "we" language on invitations when it's not clear who "we" is.

squirrly

I don't like fluffy phrases on invitations either.  Also, they should be written in third person.  SO:

Bride
and
Groom

together with their families
request the pleasure of your company
at their wedding

ac_in_dc

I actually like the wording. I think it's easier to read than most of the invites folks have posted (usually people put too many clauses and crap in the invite and aren't willing to get rid of any of them, even though half of them are superfluous).

So change it if you want, but keep the wording concise!!