Invitation Wording...

lovelybride614

Yes, I know we are super far out from our date but since we are DIY our invites, I want to have to wording down so that when it's time to work on them, it's one less stressor. Please tell me what you think. We are both going to be in our 30's and we are hosting on our own completely. Please be honest, but constructive TIA!! PS It's formatted better in my Word Doc. LOL

Ms. ***********

And

Ms. **********

Request the Honor of Your Presence at Their Wedding Ceremony

On Friday August the 8^th of Two Thousand Fourteen

At the Savannah Center

5533 Chappell Crossing Boulevard, West Chester, Ohio 45069

The Ceremony Will Begin at Seven in the Evening

Reception to Follow at the Savannah Center

Formal Attire Requested

 

lovelybride614

Ok thank you. I had read it somewhere and I didn't care for it. I thought it was supposed to be on there so I will take it off. THANKS!!!

Jen4948

In addition, don't say "the ceremony will start at X time."  Just say instead, "at seven o'clock in the evening."

Also, put the time ahead of "at the Savannah Center."

jessicabessica

I think the date should be "Friday, the eighth of August, two thousand and fourteen"

This is more formal.  

The time should be "seven o'clock in the evening" and I don't think you need to specify the ceremony is starting then, just put the time.  Since it looks like your wedding is all at the same place, I would just put "Reception to follow" at the bottom, you don't need to specify that it's at the same place.  

Like PP said, don't request particular attire unless you are actually having a black tie wedding, which means top shelf bar, multiple plated courses, band, etc. (then, you can say black tie).  Let your invitation style and venue clue people in to the formality of the event.  

I think it looks weird to have the titles in front of your and your FI's names.  

lovelybride614

Ok, I think I have all of your suggestions. How is this?

Ms. Candice A. Gee

And

Ms. Amanda L. Lasky

Request the Honor of Your Presence at Their Wedding Ceremony

On Friday the Eighth of August of Two Thousand Fourteen

At Seven o’clock in the Evening At the Savannah Center

5533 Chappell Crossing Boulevard, West Chester, Ohio

Reception to Follow 

JanoBean75

Sleeper, both are correct. It's a matter of preference.

OP, I adjusted words that don't need to be capped and rearranged your text. If your reception is at the same place, you don't need to repeat the location. One way to get wording ideas is to look through invitation albums in a stationery shop. Even if you DIY, you can get lots of ideas this way.

Ms. ***********

and

Ms. **********

request the honor of your presence

at their wedding ceremony

Friday, the eighth of August

Two Thousand Fourteen

at seven o'clock in the evening

The Savannah Center

5533 Chappell Crossing Boulevard

West Chester, Ohio

 

Reception to Follow

Jen4948

I think the time and place should be on separate lines.

Other than that, looks good.

Kate61487

ditto PPs.  Also, only the first letter of each sentance, proper nouns, and weekday/month need to be capitalized.  all the suggestions condensed below:

ETA: Great minds, Jano.  and if I put this at the bottom it's giant, so I"m sticking it up here.

***********

and

**********

request the honor of your presence
at their wedding ceremony

on Friday, the eigth of August 
two thousand fourteen
at seven o'clock in the evening

The Savannah Center

5533 Chappell Crossing Boulevard
West Chester, Ohio

 

Reception to follow

lovelybride614

Ah, ok. I totally get it. I'm a caps freak but your way looks better. You ladies ROCK

zizibet

"Honor of your presence" means the ceremony will take place in a church. For a non-church ceremony, "Ppleasure of your company" is the correct traditional wording.

lovelybride614

thank you ladies for all of your help. i really appreciate it

JanoBean75

In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_etiquette_invitation-wording-75?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:9Discussion:c98e6385-bc2c-4ea0-aadd-9172decaacf0Post:f7f77a69-9e94-4262-b0fc-2f9838ac0d95">Re: Invitation Wording...</a>:
[QUOTE]"Honor of your presence" means the ceremony will take place in a church. For a non-church ceremony, "Ppleasure of your company" is the correct traditional wording.
Posted by zizibet[/QUOTE]

Good catch, I totally missed that.

tammalam

This is a second marriage for both of us,we really dont need gifts how could it be express that we would like cash or gift cards only for furture purchases down the road. Any ideals need all the help I can get.