Wedding Invitations & Paper

Please critique my "welcome dinner" wording

I am doing pocketfold invitations, and one of my inserts is an invitation to our "welcome dinner".  Which is really just a rehersal dinner, but everyone is invited (we are lucky enough to have a very large building at our business that lets us have a lot of guests.  We're just making a ton of food and whoever wants to come can stop by).  Now, our wedding is out of town for most people, about 2 hours drive for most of our family.  But we're having it at a time that allows for travel on both sides (2 pm ceremony, reception over at 8) so we don't expect to have a ot of people coming in the night before.

So to get to the point, what I'm asking is how to put the following information on a card so it sounds good:

a) Mr. & Mrs. T (his parents) are hosting a casual dinner the night before the wedding.
b) You're welcome to come if you'll be in town
c) Call mrs. T. to rsvp if you want to come
d) It will be at such and such a place.

Its kind of hard to say "stop by if ya want" on an invitation.  Here's what I've come up with:

Mr. & Mrs. T would like to invite you to a casual welcome dinner.

If you will be joining us for the weekend, please come eat, drink and celebrate with the bride and groom!

When
Where

Please call 555-5555 if you would like to attend.


Any thoughts?  TIA!!!

Re: Please critique my "welcome dinner" wording

  • In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_please-critique-welcome-dinner-wording?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:322ef7b8-1db9-4aaf-bbb9-559927c468b1Post:853f7187-9035-4ff0-ab05-4cc494d983c3">Please critique my "welcome dinner" wording</a>:
    [QUOTE]Mr. & Mrs. T would like to invite you to a casual welcome dinner. If you will be joining us for the weekend, please come eat, drink and celebrate with the bride and groom! When Where Please call 555-5555 if you would like to attend. Any thoughts?  TIA!!!
    Posted by MeggoWaffles[/QUOTE]

    I wouldn't say they "would like to invite you" because that sounds like "awww, we'd like to invite everyone...but we just can't"  If they're inviting me, say so, if they'd just "like to" invite me, but aren't, don't tell me.  Does that make sense?

    Mr. and Mrs. T invite you to a casual welcome dinner.  Please come eat, drink, and celebrate with the bride and groom!  When.  Where.  Please RSVP to Mrs. T at 555-5555 by the 10th (or whatever) if you plan to attend.
  • I like pirate's suggestion!
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  • Very good advice!  Thank you!  :-)
  • We're doing a welcome dinner too, but it's separate from the rehearsal.  We have several "extra" activities, so our insert is a listing of those. 




    The one on the left.  Second paragraph from the bottom says

    Friday night, May 6:
    Cookout at Beth's parents' house

    We'll put specific time and driving directions in the OOT bags.  Anybody who isn't OOT already knows where my parents' house is.

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