Need your opinion on my invitation wording

ladymd81

Hi ladies! I wanted to get some opinions on our invitation wording. We are hosting the wedding, and although it's not super formal, it's not super laid-back either. Ceremony is in a garden outdoors followed by an indoor reception. Do you think our wording is too quirky for a wedding? I wanted it to be different and show our personalities a bit. Thanks!

 

together with their families,

 

 Ladymd81

and

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request the pleasure of your company

as they stand together

with trembling hands and open hearts

to exchange their vows of marriage

on saturday, the seventh of july

at five o’clock in the afternoon

 

venue name

venue address

 

reception (and happily ever after) to follow

Britoz

Just from a guest POV, it's cute! I'm a bit confused about the overnight thing though...

73jewels

I like the Happily ever after part... I think it's cute and unique

ladymd81

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[QUOTE]Just from a guest POV, it's cute! I'm a bit confused about the overnight thing though...
Posted by Britoz[/QUOTE]

Thanks! I've decided to scrap the first 2 lines, since I realized it can be confusing. It's supposed to justimply that partying will be late into the night. :)

banana468

I'm not a huge fan of the 'trembling hands' - are you both afraid?

The 'happy ever after' sounds cutesy.  It's up to you to if you like it but it seems a bit juvenile.