Invites and Paper

please proof read my invite and enclosures THANKS

If you girls could help and just proof read these =) THANKS!!


Because you have shared in
our lives by your friendship and love, we

Bride's First and Middle name and Last name
and
Groom's First and Middle name and Last name

together with our parents, invite you to
share the beginning of our new life
together when we exchange marriage vows on
Friday, the ninth of November two thousand twelve
at half after four o'clock.

Church
Address
Philadelphia,PA

The favour of a reply is requested on or before October 12th, 2012
M_________________________________________________
____Accept with pleasure
____ Decline with regret 

 Chicken Saltimbocca _____
 Tre Filet Mignon        _____
Vegtarian Pyramids   _____

Please Join Us
for a cocktail and seated dinner reception

                                   
Location name
                                    Address
                                    City, State         
                                    at seven o'clock in the evening

A block of rooms has been set aside at the
XYZ hotel in Philadelphia, PA to accommodate our guests. 
For your convenience please call 222-222-222 and reference the
Smith/Jones wedding by October 12th 2012, to obtain the
discounted rate of $50 a night.

 

Re: please proof read my invite and enclosures THANKS

  • Ditto to PP with one more change. I think it would flow better if you moved "together" up a line next to "life", so it would read like this:

    together with their parents, invite you to
    share the beginning of their new life together
    when they exchange marriage vows on
    Friday, the ninth of November two thousand twelve
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  • PeavyPeavy member
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    Vegetarian is misspelled.  What is tre filet mignon?  Might be simpler just to say filet mignon.

    A block of rooms has been reserved sounds better than "set aside."

    And I am one of those in the people who don't like the presumption of accepting with pleasure/declining with regret.
  • I agree with PPs on everything.

    Also, just say "The favour of a reply is requested by the twelfth of October". The "on or before" part is not necessary.
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