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Invitation wording

What do you think about this invite?

Mall and Tom

are getting married

Please join us on the roof of (address)

Saturday,3rd August 2013

6.30 pm

Dinner and drinks to follow

RSVP

Mobile - 000000  Home - 000000

Email - xx@xx

 

We think we need to include a small card saying how to get to the roof. But don't know how to word it. But we thought we would put something like.

 

The ceremony and reception are being held on our private roof terrace

The easiest way to access the roof is through the lift in the lobby

You will need your invitation for the doorman to let you up

 

Re: Invitation wording

  • I don't think you need to include "till late"

    After 6 years and 2 boys, finally tying the knot on October 27th, 2013!

  • Assdazaza said:

    What do you think about this invite?

    Mall and Tom

    Are getting Married

    Please join us on the roof of (address)

    Saturday,3rd August 2013

    6.30 pm

    Dinner and drinks to follow till late

    RSVP

    Mobile - 000000  Home - 000000

    Email - xx@xx

     

    We think we need to include a small card saying how to get to the roof. But don't know how to word it. But we thought we would put something like.

     

    The ceremony and reception is being held on our private roof terrace

    The easiest way to access the roof is though the lift in the lobby

    You will need you invitation for the doorman to let you up

     

    Neither "are" nor "married" needs to be capitalized. And I agree about the date swap and leaving off "till late".  Since you're including an insert about it being on the rooftop I would eliminate that altogether on the invitations itself like this:

    Mall and Tom
    are getting married

    Please join us at (address)
    Saturday, August 3rd 2013
    6.30 pm

    Dinner and drinks to follow

    Or do the phrasing more like:

    Mall and Tom
    are getting married

    Please join us for a rooftop ceremony
    at (address)
    Saturday, August 3rd 2013
    6.30 pm

    Dinner and drinks to follow

    Either way you can then include the insert:

    The ceremony and reception will be held on a private roof terrace.
    Access to the roof is available through the lift in the lobby;
    you will need your invitation for the doorman to let you up.

    But I would also recommend giving the doorman a list of guests and try to work something out with him (perhaps a nice tip?) to let people on the list up regardless of invitation because I'm sure some will forget it. 

  • fyrefly76 said:

    either do "3 August 2013" or "August 3rd, 2013"

    also, on the directions card, the ceremony and reception 'are' (not 'is'), 'though' should be 'through' and in the last sentence the second 'you' should be 'your'.  And I would add periods to the end of those three sentences.

    Just trying to help.

    Thanks

    (huh - "Just trying to help" ??)


     

    Kate61487 said:
     
     

    Neither "are" nor "married" needs to be capitalized. And I agree about the date swap and leaving off "till late".  Since you're including an insert about it being on the rooftop I would eliminate that altogether on the invitations itself like this:

    Mall and Tom
    are getting married

    Please join us at (address)
    Saturday, August 3rd 2013
    6.30 pm

    Dinner and drinks to follow

    Or do the phrasing more like:

    Mall and Tom
    are getting married

    Please join us for a rooftop ceremony
    at (address)
    Saturday, August 3rd 2013
    6.30 pm

    Dinner and drinks to follow

    Either way you can then include the insert:

    The ceremony and reception will be held on a private roof terrace.
    Access to the roof is available through the lift in the lobby;
    you will need your invitation for the doorman to let you up.

    But I would also recommend giving the doorman a list of guests and try to work something out with him (perhaps a nice tip?) to let people on the list up regardless of invitation because I'm sure some will forget it. 


    Thanks - I will sort a tip and a bottle of something for him. Fair point about getting rid of the rooftop - the first wording you gave. Thank does make sense

    Yeah I guess people will forget invite - doorman would need ID then if we are giving them him a list. Do I include that?- That you will need ID to be let up

     

    CMGr said:
    A wedding invitation needs to state clearly who, what, when and where.  Your wording fails on the "what".  Is this an invitation to attend the ceremony?  Is it a wedding reception?  Is it a celebration of a marriage that will have already taken place?  This information is not on your main invitation.
    This is why traditional wording often works best.  I think your guests will be confused.
    I would put the directions and the rsvp. information on a separate card.


    The pleasure of your company is requested

    at the marriage of

    Mall Full Name

    and

    Tom Full Name

    Saturday, the third of August

    two thousand thirteen

    at half after six o'clock

    Rooftop

    123 Main Street

    City, State


    Reception immediately to follow

    I'm trying to avoid formal and traditional.

    People really wouldn't get it is a ceremony and reception? from the invite and the insert?
    I also want to cut down on lots of bits of paper - so just a A5 invite with a card in about how to get to the roof

  • We didn't want super formal so we put something like "Please join Alycia & Tom as they tie the knot!" But I agree with CMGr you really should keep the general wording like she described. Check out a couple different invite sites to get some wording ideas (weddingpaperdivas, invitationsbydawn, vistaprint etc)

    You can keep the directions & rsvp info on one card or you can also put the directions on the back of the invite as well (though I'm not sure everyone looks at the back but I have seen invite companies put front & back invites)

    After 6 years and 2 boys, finally tying the knot on October 27th, 2013!

  • Assdazaza said:
    fyrefly76 said:

    either do "3 August 2013" or "August 3rd, 2013"

    also, on the directions card, the ceremony and reception 'are' (not 'is'), 'though' should be 'through' and in the last sentence the second 'you' should be 'your'.  And I would add periods to the end of those three sentences.

    Just trying to help.

    Thanks

    (huh - "Just trying to help" ??)


     

    Kate61487 said:
     
     

    Neither "are" nor "married" needs to be capitalized. And I agree about the date swap and leaving off "till late".  Since you're including an insert about it being on the rooftop I would eliminate that altogether on the invitations itself like this:

    Mall and Tom
    are getting married

    Please join us at (address)
    Saturday, August 3rd 2013
    6.30 pm

    Dinner and drinks to follow

    Or do the phrasing more like:

    Mall and Tom
    are getting married

    Please join us for a rooftop ceremony
    at (address)
    Saturday, August 3rd 2013
    6.30 pm

    Dinner and drinks to follow

    Either way you can then include the insert:

    The ceremony and reception will be held on a private roof terrace.
    Access to the roof is available through the lift in the lobby;
    you will need your invitation for the doorman to let you up.

    But I would also recommend giving the doorman a list of guests and try to work something out with him (perhaps a nice tip?) to let people on the list up regardless of invitation because I'm sure some will forget it. 


    Thanks - I will sort a tip and a bottle of something for him. Fair point about getting rid of the rooftop - the first wording you gave. Thank does make sense

    Yeah I guess people will forget invite - doorman would need ID then if we are giving them him a list. Do I include that?- That you will need ID to be let up

     


    I think with the 'just trying to help' comment she didn't want you to think she was correcting your spelling/grammar to be snarky

    I, personally, don't think you need to make a comment about needing IDs - I'd leave the note about needing your invitation and have the list with the doorman as a back up.  Most people bring their ID with them to prove they're 21 if nothing else.  If it really came down to it would the doorman let someone up without ID or invitation if they are with someone who does have an ID and is on the list?  Or could a friend/relative be tagged as the "confirm they're legit guests" person in case of a (rare) 'emergency'?

  • I like CMGr's wording best.  I also don't like telephone RSVPs.  I just don't. If you want to make it more casual you could do the whole "tying the knot" thing, but people need to understand what they are attending.

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    June 1, 2013 - finally making it official!

  • We didn't want the formal wording either. Ours says "Bride and Groom invite you to their wedding."
  • Assdazaza said:
    fyrefly76 said:

    either do "3 August 2013" or "August 3rd, 2013"

    also, on the directions card, the ceremony and reception 'are' (not 'is'), 'though' should be 'through' and in the last sentence the second 'you' should be 'your'.  And I would add periods to the end of those three sentences.

    Just trying to help.

    Thanks

    (huh - "Just trying to help" ??)


     

    Kate61487 said:
     
     

    Neither "are" nor "married" needs to be capitalized. And I agree about the date swap and leaving off "till late".  Since you're including an insert about it being on the rooftop I would eliminate that altogether on the invitations itself like this:

    Mall and Tom
    are getting married

    Please join us at (address)
    Saturday, August 3rd 2013
    6.30 pm

    Dinner and drinks to follow

    Or do the phrasing more like:

    Mall and Tom
    are getting married

    Please join us for a rooftop ceremony
    at (address)
    Saturday, August 3rd 2013
    6.30 pm

    Dinner and drinks to follow

    Either way you can then include the insert:

    The ceremony and reception will be held on a private roof terrace.
    Access to the roof is available through the lift in the lobby;
    you will need your invitation for the doorman to let you up.

    But I would also recommend giving the doorman a list of guests and try to work something out with him (perhaps a nice tip?) to let people on the list up regardless of invitation because I'm sure some will forget it. 


    Thanks - I will sort a tip and a bottle of something for him. Fair point about getting rid of the rooftop - the first wording you gave. Thank does make sense

    Yeah I guess people will forget invite - doorman would need ID then if we are giving them him a list. Do I include that?- That you will need ID to be let up

     

    CMGr said:
    A wedding invitation needs to state clearly who, what, when and where.  Your wording fails on the "what".  Is this an invitation to attend the ceremony?  Is it a wedding reception?  Is it a celebration of a marriage that will have already taken place?  This information is not on your main invitation.
    This is why traditional wording often works best.  I think your guests will be confused.
    I would put the directions and the rsvp. information on a separate card.


    The pleasure of your company is requested

    at the marriage of

    Mall Full Name

    and

    Tom Full Name

    Saturday, the third of August

    two thousand thirteen

    at half after six o'clock

    Rooftop

    123 Main Street

    City, State


    Reception immediately to follow

    I'm trying to avoid formal and traditional.

    People really wouldn't get it is a ceremony and reception? from the invite and the insert?
    I also want to cut down on lots of bits of paper - so just a A5 invite with a card in about how to get to the roof

    Avoiding the formal and traditional has left people scratching their heads, wondering what they were invited to.  In Miss Manners' Guide to Excruciatingly Correct Behavior, someone wrote to her who got a wedding invitation that was worded with lots of fluff, and they couldn't tell if they were invited to the ceremony or not, so they skipped it and just attended the reception, thus offending the couple.

    So we don't advise it unless the ceremony is extremely informal.
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