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NER - proof my menu?

emeejeeayenemeejeeayen member
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edited July 2013 in Wedding Etiquette Forum
I designed a typographic menu (idea stolen from Gail Simmons - LINK) that I'm going to print on thick craft paper, I think (I'll see what I find at Paper-Source today), with just one for each table. Would anyone mind proofing this for me?

Thanks!


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Re: NER - proof my menu?

  • YUM! I'd love to eat at your wedding. :) And the menu is fun.

    Should it be "butter-whipped potatoes"? With a hyphen? Just a thought.
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  • edited July 2013
    I think it looks nice. 

    1) ArugUla
    2) can you list the cupcake flavors? I'm nosy and would want to know.  
    3) I think since it's so clean, I don't like the fixin's line. I'd leave it as smoores bar. 
    4) Can you make the narrow lines slightly wider? I had trouble reading the butter in the salad and the cream sauce in the ravioli. 

    I'm also being picky... fix arugula and you're set. 

  • ugh I always spell arugula wrong. Every single time. Thank you!

    I have honestly no idea if it should be butter-whipped or butter whipped. 
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  • Oh and I'll list them here, but there will be a cupcake of each flavor on display under a dome with the flavor on it - chocolate/chocolate, red velvet with cream cheese, strawberry cake with vanilla buttercream.

    Our wedding cake is neapolitan (dense chocolate cake and vanilla cake sandwiching strawberry buttercream with fresh strawberries). 
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  • Could it be buttered whipped potatoes?
  • I couldn't have told you how arugula was spelled either way. :)

    I'm going to throw out there that I like the juxtaposition of wider lines vs. narrow just for style...

    It's a fun idea. I like it. I originally wanted to do a printed menu but I've done so many DIY projects at this point I've run out of steam. Maybe I'll get energy back!
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  • I love the design! I would use butter-whipped potatoes. Also, this is just a stylistic preference, but I would be consistent and just use "&" instead of a mix of "&" and "and".
  • The food sounds delicious but I'll be honest, I'm not a fan of the layout.  When I first opened it up my eyes didn't know where to look.  I think it's mostly due to the wide mixture of font sizes and types.
  • JoanE2012 said:
    The food sounds delicious but I'll be honest, I'm not a fan of the layout.  When I first opened it up my eyes didn't know where to look.  I think it's mostly due to the wide mixture of font sizes and types.
    I was having this problem, too. I think this could be improved if you increase the space above the entrees and the vertical line above it. This is where I was having the most problems, visually. Agree with "butter-whipped." Could you add an acute accent over the first "e" in "entree"? The word always looks a little off to me if it's missing the accent, but I'm just being picky.

    Oh, and could you send me any leftover food? I would eat all of this!
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  • Omg YUM!! I agree that they layout is challenging at first, and I wonder if any older guests would have troubles reading it all the way through?
  • Some of the narrow lines are really bothering me. It's like the dressing is hush-hush, and then ZOMG SHALLOTS. It's the typeface - it gives emphasis to the wrong things.

    I agree on using "and" or "&" consistently instead of mixing them.

    I'd just leave it at "Cupcakes" or "a variety of cupcakes" instead of saying "three flavors of".

    I also agree with "fixins". That makes it sound like a BBQ with baked potatoes. Either "fixings" or just say "S'Mores". People will figure out there are toppings when they get there.

    Also, for the potatoes, I'd just say "Whipped Potatoes". Potatoes almost always come with butter. If you want butter mentioned, hyphenate it (butter-whipped).
  • I actually really love it, but I also love graphic design and typography. If you're concerned that guests may not be able to read it, you can always increase the canvas/document dimensions and give a little more breathing room to the separate elements. Also, he typeface that you use for "with butter and" and "sides to share" looks very compressed and difficult to read. Are you using Photoshop or Indesign? If so, I'd recommend increasing the vertical "stretch" of that typeface to make it more readable. 

    TL;DR: I think your kerning (space b/w characters) is fine, but the leading (space between lines and elements) is too camped.
  • GB520GB520 member
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    I love it. I think everything looks awesome and loved fixins. It made me hungry!!!
  • 'August Fourte?  Did you mean August Fourth or Fourteenth?
  • 'August Fourte?  Did you mean August Fourth or Fourteenth?
    Huh? It says, "August Fourth." Beneath that it says, "Two Thousand Thirteen."
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  • 'August Fourte?  Did you mean August Fourth or Fourteenth?
    Huh? It says, "August Fourth." Beneath that it says, "Two Thousand Thirteen."
    The menu keeps coming up and down.  Why not leave the original and then just add revisions so people can see how it's progressing.  It will also help future posters understand the flow of the thread conversation thus far.
  • SMarie89SMarie89 member
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    edited July 2013
    I agree with the fixin's thing.

    Also, in regards to the chicken - I'm kind of confused. The other two entrees list the sauces they come with and a garnish (crispy shallots or truffled popcorn). The chicken says "lemon and garlic & white wine." I totally understand if that is a sauce description you're going for there but it does not convey it at all. I'm imagining a roasted chicken with chunks of lemon and garlic as a garnish and a glass of white wine. Or rather a rustic roasted chicken seasoned with lemon and garlic and a glass of white wine on the side. In which case, I'd be pissed if I ordered one of the other two options and did not get a glass of wine with my meal but the chicken people got a glass specialized to their meal. Also, does the chicken come with a garnish?  

    I think you need to work through the actual foods and make sure you're conveying the dishes correctly as I have no idea what the rustic chicken dish actually consists of based on your menu right now. If it is a lemon, garlic and white wine sauce - then you should just say that. But also, is there a garnish you need to include or is it just chicken?

    Also, it is a bit busy. I, too, did not know where to start when I looked at it. I love, love, love typography. I am all about making art with words. But it just looks too busy. If you're going to do typography, you have to do it right. Something like this: http://www.behance.net/gallery/Modern-wedding-menu/4770983 (<---click) is much easier to read. But it still has that modern typography look. 
  • JoanE2012 said:
    'August Fourte?  Did you mean August Fourth or Fourteenth?
    Huh? It says, "August Fourth." Beneath that it says, "Two Thousand Thirteen."
    The menu keeps coming up and down.  Why not leave the original and then just add revisions so people can see how it's progressing.  It will also help future posters understand the flow of the thread conversation thus far.
    I literally haven't touched the document.
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  • SMarie89 said:
    I agree with the fixin's thing.

    Also, in regards to the chicken - I'm kind of confused. The other two entrees list the sauces they come with and a garnish (crispy shallots or truffled popcorn). The chicken says "lemon and garlic & white wine." I totally understand if that is a sauce description you're going for there but it does not convey it at all. I'm imagining a roasted chicken with chunks of lemon and garlic as a garnish and a glass of white wine. Or rather a rustic roasted chicken seasoned with lemon and garlic and a glass of white wine on the side. In which case, I'd be pissed if I ordered one of the other two options and did not get a glass of wine with my meal but the chicken people got a glass specialized to their meal. Also, does the chicken come with a garnish?  

    I think you need to work through the actual foods and make sure you're conveying the dishes correctly as I have no idea what the rustic chicken dish actually consists of based on your menu right now. If it is a lemon, garlic and white wine sauce - then you should just say that. But also, is there a garnish you need to include or is it just chicken?

    Also, it is a bit busy. I, too, did not know where to start when I looked at it. I love, love, love typography. I am all about making art with words. But it just looks too busy. If you're going to do typography, you have to do it right. Something like this: http://www.behance.net/gallery/Modern-wedding-menu/4770983 (<---click) is much easier to read. But it still has that modern typography look. 
    It's family style, so every single person will be able to have a piece of every single dish. Each table will get a platter with enough pieces of each option for each person to have a full serving. 

    The chicken is basically this recipe: http://www.nigella.com/recipes/view/slow-roasted-garlic-and-lemon-chicken-203   (so yes, pieces of lemon and garlic)
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  • Oh duh - I didn't see that it was family style. As a big fan of lemon and garlic, I think that sounds delish. Still, I think you should clarify what the white wine is in regards to the recipe. You could say "a white wine glaze" or "infused with white wine" something to that effect. I still think of a glass of white wine when it just says "with white wine." 
  • JoanE2012 said:
    'August Fourte?  Did you mean August Fourth or Fourteenth?
    Huh? It says, "August Fourth." Beneath that it says, "Two Thousand Thirteen."
    The menu keeps coming up and down.  Why not leave the original and then just add revisions so people can see how it's progressing.  It will also help future posters understand the flow of the thread conversation thus far.
    I literally haven't touched the document.
    Hmmph.  Ok, I apologize.  When I opened the thread on a 2 separate occasions it wasn't there.  Probably a technical glitch.
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