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Wording help. . .please?

Blambert01022010Blambert01022010
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We are having an October wedding and me and my FI our hosting it. I don't know how to really word my invites. I have a little sample of what I thought my sound pretty good. I just want some more opinions on what others  think about it. Any suggestions are welcome!

We decided on forever...
and forever begins when we,
Melissa Lee
and
Charles Bradley
get married
on October 9th, 2018
at 7:30 p.m.
docked at
The Biltmore Hotel
Bolton Landing, New York

Reception to follow
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Re: Wording help. . .please?

  • LeiselEBLeiselEB member
    2500 Comments Second Anniversary 5 Love Its
    Is that date correct? If so, you have PLENTY of time to worry about these. Years. In any case...

    Personally, I think that straightforward is always best. This is a little bit casual sounding, and slightly confusing. I'd suggest something like this, and you can always do a little poem or something at the very top:

    The pleasure of your company is requested
    at the marriage of
    Bride's Full Name
    and
    Groom's Full Name
    on the ninth of October
    year spelled out
    at half after seven o'clock
    The Biltmore Hotel
    Bolton Landing, New York

    Reception to follow


    I wasn't sure about "docked at". Is this on a boat? I'd try to say something more specific than what you have, because it doesn't really say where the wedding is.
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  • QueerFemmeQueerFemme member
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    I don't think you need to try to hard to be "cute" with your wording.  I like Leisel's wording.  that's how we did ours, except that on the second line, we changed it slightly: 

    The pleasure of your company is requested
    to witness the marriage of


    Mostly because, some of our friends thought we were having a private, immediate family only ceremony... and the reception was just going to be the party.  But, we decided on a different venue so everyone could see the ceremony.  So, I didn't want folks strolling up late thinking it was just an informal, casual party.

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    Websites/blogs where our wedding has been featured:

    http://www.dapperq.com/2013/11/a-very-dapper-wedding/

    http://www.onabicyclebuiltfortwo.com/2013/10/wedding-christina-g.html

    http://4realequalityweddings.com/2014/05/16/g-christina/

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  • QueerFemmeQueerFemme member
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    PS - wedding invites should never be in the "first person".  Even if you and your fiance host it, you should avoid "we" words.

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    Websites/blogs where our wedding has been featured:

    http://www.dapperq.com/2013/11/a-very-dapper-wedding/

    http://www.onabicyclebuiltfortwo.com/2013/10/wedding-christina-g.html

    http://4realequalityweddings.com/2014/05/16/g-christina/

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  • Kristin789Kristin789 member
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    What you have does not invite the receiver to attend anything.The advice given by previous posters is perfect.
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  • Blambert01022010Blambert01022010
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    In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_wording-help-please-2?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:8e3a4f03-152a-4501-97bc-57fa6dd5b368Post:223f8f2b-e13f-459d-9917-6261468ecc78">Re: Wording help. . .please?</a>:
    [QUOTE]I<strong>s that date correct?</strong> If so, you have PLENTY of time to worry about these. Years. In any case... Personally, I think that straightforward is always best. This is a little bit casual sounding, and slightly confusing. I'd suggest something like this, and you can always do a little poem or something at the very top: The pleasure of your company is requested at the marriage of Bride's Full Name and Groom's Full Name on the ninth of October year spelled out at half after seven o'clock The Biltmore Hotel Bolton Landing, New York Reception to follow I wasn't sure about "docked at". Is this on a boat? I'd try to say something more specific than what you have, because it doesn't really say where the wedding is.
    Posted by LeiselEB[/QUOTE]
    Lol, oh no not the right date nor year. Itc October 20,2012. Thanks this help me a bit more! I wasn't sure if I should right out the time and year. Thanks alot!
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  • Blambert01022010Blambert01022010
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    In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_wording-help-please-2?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:8e3a4f03-152a-4501-97bc-57fa6dd5b368Post:22a086fd-6724-4f64-83ba-2b78b7b9668d">Re: Wording help. . .please?</a>:
    [QUOTE]PS - <strong>wedding invites should never be in the "first person".  Even if you and your fiance host it, you should avoid "we" words.</strong>
    Posted by cmgilpin[/QUOTE]
     I did not know this, thank God for people like Y'all who have done it and know!
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  • Blambert01022010Blambert01022010
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    edited May 2012
    Okay girls how about this? This is MINE and not a bunch of sample stuff.

    He proposed to her on bended knee,
    He asked "Will you travel through life with me?" (Top poem as LeiselEB suggested, and I also use her wording. Hope that's okay! :) )

    The pleasure of your company is requested
    at the marriage of
    Brittany Lee Lambert
    and
    Sean Michael Gonzalez
    on the twentieth of October
    two thousand and twelve
    at half after seven o'clock
    The Biltmore Hotel
    Bolton Landing, New York

    Reception to follow
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  • LeiselEBLeiselEB member
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    In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_wording-help-please-2?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:8e3a4f03-152a-4501-97bc-57fa6dd5b368Post:97b2a67e-bb48-44bb-bdff-a206c959dfea">Re: Wording help. . .please?</a>:
    [QUOTE]Okay girls how about this? This is MINE and not a bunch of sample stuff. He proposed to her on bended knee, He asked "Will you travel through life with me?" (Top poem as LeiselEB suggested, and I also use her wording. Hope that's okay! :) ) The pleasure of your company is requested at the marriage of Brittany Lee Lambert and Sean Michael Gonzalez on the twentieth of October two thousand and twelve at half after seven o'clock The Biltmore Hotel Bolton Landing, New York Reception to follow
    Posted by Blambert01022010[/QUOTE]

    <div>That looks perfect :)</div>
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  • Blambert01022010Blambert01022010
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    In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_wording-help-please-2?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:8e3a4f03-152a-4501-97bc-57fa6dd5b368Post:85e5f64f-0db3-41f8-884c-868a4d385add">Re: Wording help. . .please?</a>:
    [QUOTE]In Response to Re: Wording help. . .please? : <strong> That looks perfect :)</strong>
    Posted by LeiselEB[/QUOTE]
    Thanks and thanks for the help! One more question. When you are wording the reply cards when should the RSVP date be? A month before the wedding?
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    In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_wording-help-please-2?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:8e3a4f03-152a-4501-97bc-57fa6dd5b368Post:95b06e1a-fe35-4832-a347-2e2804c06142">Re: Wording help. . .please?</a>:
    [QUOTE]In Response to Re: Wording help. . .please? : Thanks and thanks for the help! One more question. When you are wording the reply cards when should the RSVP date be? A month before the wedding?
    Posted by Blambert01022010[/QUOTE]<div>
    </div><div>Find out when your venue or caterer needs a final head count, and then add a week or two so that you can track down any non-responders. Usually 2-4 weeks is standard. 

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  • Blambert01022010Blambert01022010
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    In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_wording-help-please-2?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:8e3a4f03-152a-4501-97bc-57fa6dd5b368Post:46682b2c-1c80-4eee-aa20-d048e4fe776c">Re: Wording help. . .please?</a>:
    [QUOTE]In Response to Re: Wording help. . .please? : Find out when your venue or caterer needs a final head count, and then add a week or two so that you can track down any non-responders. Usually 2-4 weeks is standard. 
    Posted by LeiselEB[/QUOTE] Alright, thanks a lot!
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  • Blambert01022010Blambert01022010
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    In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_wording-help-please-2?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:8e3a4f03-152a-4501-97bc-57fa6dd5b368Post:8495b820-197c-49c9-8c28-54e17527d51e">Re: Wording help. . .please?</a>:
    [QUOTE]Almost!  A few tweeks: The pleasure of your company is requested at the marriage of Brittany Lee Lambert and Sean Michael Gonzalez Saturday,   the twentieth of October two thousand and twelve half after seven o'clock The Biltmore Hotel Bolton Landing, New York Reception to follow
    Posted by CMGr[/QUOTE]
    Oh my! I almost printed them and forgot that! Thanks for catching that!
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