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Wording Help on TY to Parents

I am finishing up our programs and struggling with this part. I have a standard "thanks for travelling, etc" Thank You for the general population at the top, and then wanted a very heartfelt note to our parents at the bottom, but I'm stuck.

Overall, the message I'd like to get across is that they have set a great example for us through their own marriages. They started off "poorer" and worked together to the "richer," (well, established). We have each had one parent fight, and beat, cancer, and saw first hand what the other parent had to sacrifice to keep everything going.

It's also difficult to write it in the "multiple second person" (I might have just made up that term) from us to both sets of parents, so maybe I need to switch the "you" to "they."

Here is what I have so far, I would greatly appreciate some input in helping me get my points across to our parents and congregation.
We are so thankful for the examples you all have set for our marriage. Thank you for showing us what it means to vow “forever” to another person; what it takes to budget through “poorer” until “richer” happens; and what a healthy spouse must sacrifice when the other is ill. Thank you for showing us a love to which we can aspire.
I feel like I'm calling them all poor (more accurately, they were just "starting out") and then calling whoever got sick a burden to the other person! Not really the heartfelt thank you I wanted it to sound like.
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Re: Wording Help on TY to Parents

  • I would keep it simple - "We would like to thank our parents for setting such strong examples of  happy marriages and for showing us what it means to be committed for life, through thick and thin. We love you!"

    I think saying something like "through thick and thin" will include your sentiments about how they came from poorer backgrounds and made something of themselves, and about how they cared for each other in times of illness - without having to rehash all that information. 
  • Leisel and mobkaz: You hit the nail on the head! Thank you for the wordings. You are so right that I was getting clumsy trying to hash out the circumstances. Thanks for helping me simplify while keeping the original meaning I wanted in there.

    Thanks for everyone's input!
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