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How does this look?

BrideofBigSurBrideofBigSur
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This was the one thing I thought I wouldn't have any trouble with! I was wrong :)

Parents on both sides are contributing...the reception is at a different location later in the day. I know a lot of people are against gaps, but a lot of guests specifically requested time to explore the park, so we made it happen.

It is our moment to celebrate
the love that unites us
Jodi _____
and
Abe _____
Together with our parents
we invite you to share with us
this joyous celebration of loveAt ten-thirty in the morning
on June 12th, 2010
at Glacier Point
Yosemite National Park  After taking some timeTo explore Yosemite,please join us at five o’clock in the evening
for the reception, dinner, and dance
_____State Highway 49Mariposa, CA95338


Looking for any feedback, thanks! I can't wait to get these out....one more thing off the list!

We're just two lost souls swimmin' in a fish bowl, year after year
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  • BrideofBigSurBrideofBigSur
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    Damn, it ruined my formatting....
    It is our moment to celebrate
    the love that unites us
    Jodi_____
    and
    Abe_____
    Together with our parents
    we invite you to share with us
    this joyous celebration of love
    At ten-thirty in the morning
    on June 12, 2010
    at Glacier Point
    Yosemite National Park

    After taking some time to explore Yosemite,
    please join us at five o'clock in the evening
    for the reception, dinner, and dance
    _____State Highway 49
    Mariposa, CA
    96338
    We're just two lost souls swimmin' in a fish bowl, year after year
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  • BrideofBigSurBrideofBigSur
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    thanks, I thought it sounded off, somehow. It was a template that came with the invites that I tried to follow. Squirrly, I see your point about wordiness, aren't the "joyful" and "celebration" parts assumed with a wedding? Unless shotguns are involved. ;)
    I believe i will go ahead with the simple version - thanks for the third-person tips too.
    We're just two lost souls swimmin' in a fish bowl, year after year
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    In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_this-look-1?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:6fafc4b0-03be-401a-896f-53266d105464Post:d92e70ea-0b7a-45fe-bd20-be662a963071">Re: How does this look?</a>:
    [QUOTE]thanks, I thought it sounded off, somehow. It was a template that came with the invites that I tried to follow. Squirrly, I see your point about wordiness, <strong>aren't the "joyful" and "celebration" parts assumed with a wedding?</strong> Unless shotguns are involved. ;) I believe i will go ahead with the simple version - thanks for the third-person tips too.
    Posted by BrideofBigSur[/QUOTE]

    Exactly!  It gets redundant, and then I hear a 16 year old HS cheerleader voice in my head, squeeing through the whole thing. 

    "eeeeee!  joy! ful!  cele! bration!"

    Makes me want to pull my hair out.  I'm glad you like the simple version.  It's just easier to read, I think.  Good luck!
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