Opinions needed please

Re: Opinions needed please

• banana468 member

  

  May 2012

  I like the 2nd one better but I have to say I'm not a big fan of the wording.  Is it too late to change?  If you're not getting married until September, you don't need to order now.

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• xlqueenielx member

  

  May 2012

  what is wrong with the wording?

  

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• xlqueenielx member

  

  May 2012

  Maybe it's just me but with what you have mention the only error I would personally see would be the "request the honor of your presence" part. I found this template on a site and felt it matched my relationship well. I don't feel that the people I am sending these to would even notice or have an issue with the other things you had mentioned.

  I appreciate the information but I wanted my invite to be more personal and to me this is it.

  

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• xlqueenielx member

  

  May 2012

  It was more about the design than the wording but thank you.

  

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• banana468 member

  

  May 2012

  Ditto CMGr.
  
  Aside from the issues with the use of 'honour of your presence' there are also issues with the wording of the date and time. 
  
  I also don't love the 'end of the courtship' wording at all.  It makes it seem like you're getting down to something forced.  There's something about the use of the word 'end' that comes off as a negative to me.

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• LeiselEB member

  

  May 2012

  I'm also not a big fan of that wording - however, if you like it and you think your guests will be okay with it, then go for it. Honestly, the simpler the better is my opinion

  
  

  One thing that really stuck out to me, though, was that your fiance's name has an apostrophe-s at the end. It just looks very odd to me. This keeps some of your wording in place, but makes your names looks a little better: (I will say, though, that "end their courtship", even though it's not a bad thing sort of comes across as a negative. I'd omit that and go from the names right into "exchange wedding vows")

  
  

  The pleasure of your company is requested as

  
  

  Brittany & Eric

  
  

  end their courtship and exchange wedding vows

  
  

  Sunday, the sixteenth of September

  two thousand twelve

  at half after three o'clock

  
  

  Bradford Country Club

  201 Chadwick Road

  Bradford, Massachusetts

  
  

  Reception to follow

  
  

  Hope that helps

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• libby2483 member

  

  May 2012

  I personally would not include anything about a long courtship, but this is your personal preference.  The thing that sticks out to me in the wording is that you switch between first person (we) and third person (their), which sounds funny.  Invitations should always be in third person.  Also, you wrote out the time, but not the date, which seems to reflect different levels of formality.

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• DiLynn83 member

  

  May 2012 edited May 2012

  I think other posters have covered the issues with your wording quite well, so I'll just ditto them on all counts.

  
  

  As for the design, I agree with your concerns.  The pattern IS sideways, and I'm not a fan.  Your names are so little compared to the massive "&" between them.  The spacing between lines isn't balanced.  I don't like that your name and your FI's name are in different colors.

  
  

  Even in the second version, the spacing and sizing is all wrong.

  
  

  I'm sorry, I know this is probably coming off very harsh and I don't mean for it to.  I would start over.  You have plenty of time to correct the wording and style issues.

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• wedgrl651

  

  May 2012

  If you're having a very casual wedding, I'd say that the wording is ok, otherwise, you should switch to the more formal. It sounds and looks much better.

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• ilovemedia

  

  June 2012

  The first one is better. I kind of not agree much with the font. But it's okay.
  
  

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