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PROOF READ PLEASE

lwogslandlwogsland member
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in Wedding Invitations & Paper
about to print my invites...

can you guys proof read for me please..

  “ Many are the stars I see,                                but in my eye no star like thee”

Libby Bride
                 and                                            

Patrick Groom

along with their parents,
invite you to sharein their happiness
as they unite in marriage. 

Saturday, the twenty-eighth of August,
two thousand ten
at two o’clock in the afternoon 

St John Lutheran Church
Address
City, State


Reception to follow  
 formatting..the top quote is aligned differently..it didnt paste well..and the and is centered underneath our names)

thanks! 
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Re: PROOF READ PLEASE

  • squirrlysquirrly member
    Name Dropper First Anniversary 5 Love Its First Comment
    The font is really difficult to read.  It makes "al" look like a d.  And that's just BAD for a few of the instances where it occurs.  

    Drop the comma at the end of the date line.

    I would actually change "Along with their parents" to say "together with their parents".

    And, I personally would drop the quote.  Too much stuff for an invitation.  But, the text you have is a
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  • ootmother2ootmother2 member
    First Anniversary 5 Love Its First Answer Name Dropper
    It's two thousand AND ten.

    Horrible grammar and math but etiquette wise, it's correct.

    other than that, what pps said
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  • bbyckesbbyckes member
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    Leave out the "and."  Two thousand ten.
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  • yourlittlestarsyourlittlestars
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    "Share in their" line seems a bit crowded, as share in looks like one word. That may just be a formatting issue on here though. Looks good. :) Its really how you want it to look and sound. Casual v. "proper", and whatever style makes you and your FI happy.
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