Can someone proof read please?

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  coraleetbwed member

  

  November 2012

  And between names = should be and
  Mr. and Mrs Bride = should be Mr. and Mrs. Bride
  Again, And = should be and
  four thirty should be half after four or four-thirty
  
  There is always a discusion here as to whether to use the "and" in the year.
  
  This is what I found in Crane's:
  

  http://blog.crane.com/2012/02/28/wedding-invitation-etiquette-a-line-by-line-guide/

  
  Isn’t it incorrect to use “and,” as in “Two thousand and one”?
  In mathematics “and” denotes a decimal point, and since there’s no decimal point in the year “2001,” it may seem incorrect to use “and.”
  Wedding invitations, however, are not mathematical equations, so the use of “and” as a decimal point is irrelevant. On wedding invitations, “and” is used simply as a connective word.

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  Jen4948 member

  

  November 2012

  In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_can-someone-proof-read-please?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:de10bcf4-9601-40c3-b647-2d7fe59144fePost:b491eb01-1581-4d66-994b-e8be77d710ec">Can someone proof read please?</a>:
  [QUOTE]  Because you have shared in our lives by your friendship and love, we Bride Middle And Mr Groom together with our parents Mr. and Mrs Bride And Mr. and Mr. Groom invite you to share the beginning of our new life together when we exchange marriage vows Saturday, the thirteenth of July two thousand thirteen at two in the afternoon Church Address City cocktail at four thirty held at the hotel Any thoughts or suggestions?  
  Posted by brideRegN[/QUOTE]
  
  I'd use instead either
  
  Mr. and Mrs. Bride's Parents
  and
  Mr. and Mrs. Groom's Parents
  request the honour of your presence
  at the marriage of their children
  Bride
  and
  Groom
  Date
  Address
  City, State
  Time
  
  or
  
  Together with their parents
  Bride
  and
  Groom
  request the honour of your presence
  at their marriage
  Date
  Address
  City, State
  Time
  
  I'm not a fan of "as they exchange marriage vows"(that happens at every wedding) or "share in their celebration, love, joy, beginning of new life together," etc. (also supposedly happens at every wedding).  It can read like verbal PDA and traditionally, wording that emphasized the joy of the occasion actually was a signal that something was wrong, like an unwanted pregnancy.  Traditional wording has the built-in assumption that all is well and the couple are inviting you to share in a joyous, loving occasion.

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  banana468 member

  

  November 2012

  The invitation should read in the 3rd person:
  
  

  Because you have shared in their lives by your friendship and love   together with their parents Bride Middle Last and Mr Groom Middle Last request the honour of your presence when they exchange vows Saturday, the thirteenth of July two thousand and thirteen at two o'clock in the afternoon Church Address City   Reception to follow Four o'clock Location

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