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Invitation wording

JesskwarrenJesskwarren member
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Hi ladies... I need help with my invitation wording. My parents are divorced but my mom kept my dads last name and both of them are helping fund it along with his parents. So this is what I came up with. I feel like it may be too many lines.. Please tear it apart in terms of spelling, punctuation, anything and everything... Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated. Thanks in advance! Mrs. Susan Curtis W.. Mr. Richard Stafford W.. request the honor of your presence at the marriage of their daughter Jessica Katherine W.. to Michael George Thomas K... son of Mr. and Mrs. George Thomas K.. on Saturday, the twelfth of December two thousand nine at four o'clock Seville Golf and Country Club Gilbert, Arizona
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Re: Invitation wording

  • brookelynpaisleybrookelynpaisley member
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    edited December 2011
    I think it's fine, except I think your mom should be "Ms. Susan..." since she's divorced. I believe you would put "and" between hers and your dad's name too, but someone might know for sure. If you feel like there are too many lines, you could remove the "son of..." line. However, I wanted that in mine too so that both parents were represented. The invitation we chose had a graphic and it had to be removed. Also, if it's wordyor cluttery when arranged on the invite, you could remove yours and your fiance's last names - since you have both parents' names listed, you don't really need it.
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  • 1104*Celsius1104*Celsius
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    edited December 2011
    Ditto the removal of you and Fi's last names, they are unnecessary overkill. I think you can/should also add "in the afternoon" after the time. Technically "honor of your presence" is reserved for ceremonies held in a church, synagogue or other house of worship. It would (again, technically) be more correct to say "pleasure of your company", regardless of whether or not the service is religious. I don't think you need a comma after Saturday. I know, it feels weird without it, but I don't think it has to be there. (And Seville is a gorgeous venue, we loved it! It was just too far out for us.)
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  • 1104*Celsius1104*Celsius
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    edited December 2011
    Oh, and I don't think you need an "and" between your parents' names, as it connotes marriage. The rest looks great!
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  • brookelynpaisleybrookelynpaisley member
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    edited December 2011
    http://www.invitationconsultants.com/samplewording.aspx?p_subcategory=200This indicates that you use "and" but the parents go on separate lines to denote that they're not married.
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  • JesskwarrenJesskwarren member
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    edited December 2011
    Thanks so much! :) Those were the things I was unsure about
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  • JesskwarrenJesskwarren member
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    edited December 2011
    Oh and we love Seville. Lizzy there has been amazing to work with.
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