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I need help with wording....kinda long...sorry

So....long story short, I finally figured out how to make my own table numbers with pictures of our pooch. :) However, we are doing a donation instead of favors. There will be bookmarks for the guests that says thanks, yadda yadda yadda. What I need help with is explaining the meaning behind it. We're going to secure this to the back of the table numbers so one side is the pooch and the other is explaining what the organization is all about. This is what I have so far, but I don't feel like the second paragraph sounds right. I'll take whatever advice or suggestions you girls have. Thanks so much... The WGA-sponsored Evans Scholars Foundation administers the nation’s largest privately funded college scholarship program. Since 1930, over 8,900 deserving young caddies have earned their college degrees through Evans Scholarships. Today, 865 caddies are attending college as Evans Scholars. The Evans Scholarship was founded by golf great Charles “Chick” Evans Jr. (1890-1979). "Patrick and Kristen were both Evans Scholarship recipients. Patrick chose Ohio State University and Kristen chose Purdue University. The two met during a Big Ten football game in November of 2004. The couple has chosen this foundation as a way to give back to the program that has helped to guide their paths in life and brought them together".

Re: I need help with wording....kinda long...sorry

  • jojod1075jojod1075 member
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    edited December 2011
    Hi Kristen, Sounds good! Even though when I saw the word caddy, i figured out that the WGA is probably the World Golfing Assn, I'm not sure. Will all of your guests know what it is? The other thing -- 2nd paragraph, 3rd sentence -- I think you can take out the word "to" after "helped"  -- it reads fine without it. Glad to know I'm not the only one not giving in to wasteful favors!
  • kmbeyerkmbeyer member
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    edited December 2011
    You're the best! I'm so glad you pointed those things out! I would never have thought of those things (and I'm a Language Arts teacher!!). I definitely will spell out the WGA part and take out the to... ThAnKs!!! And yes...I'm glad to hear I'm not alone as well! Who are you donating to?
  • jojod1075jojod1075 member
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    edited December 2011
    Glad to help! it's so hard to notice the small things sometimes when you've been slaving away at something! We haven't finalized who we're donating to yet, but I think we're going to donate a little bit to a few. This is what we're thinking so far: the Crohns & Colitis Foundation of America (I have colitis), Susan G Komen Breast Cancer Found (both our moms are survivors), the ASPCA, & prob a Jewish org that's important to us. I think how you two are giving back to the scholarship fund that sent you to college is fantastic!
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