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1st draft of vows- please critique

rikkidawn28rikkidawn28 member
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These vows will be said after the more traditional vows (which we will repeat after the officiate)

May our marriage embody the characericstics of honesty, fidelity and soul. May we experience new beginnings together now and in the future. May our love revlove around passionate devotion and undying laughter. Last but not least, may our love grow and last always.
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Re: 1st draft of vows- please critique

  • MichonipMichonip
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    That's lovely.  Short and sentimental.
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  • rikkidawn28rikkidawn28 member
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    Thanks! I thought your vows are great as well :)
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  • [Deleted User][Deleted User] member
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    I think that sounds like something the officiant should say to you in closing of the vows.  Just change the "our" to "your".
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  • rikkidawn28rikkidawn28 member
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    Thanks for the feedback. I will say the above vows to my fiance after repeating some more traditional vows (from the officiiant). I write poetry so I guess that is why the styole of the writing is a little different from other vow wordings.
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  • joe&cassiejoe&cassie
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    Our marriage will embody the characericstics of honesty, fidelity and soul. I hope we will experience new beginnings together now and in the future. Our love will revlove around passionate devotion and undying laughter. Last but not least, our love will grow and last always. I just changed it a little so it doesnt sound like someone should be saying it to you guys. But thats just my opinion. sounds lovely either way.
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