Please check my invitations

mcdol3 · January 2011

Hey ladies,

We are having a full mass for our ceremony. Both our parents and us are paying for the wedding, but it's mostly them. Can you check our wording?
Any suggestions?

Do you like the look of it

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Calypso1977 · January 2011

i would do:

request the honor of your presence at the marriage of their children in the sacrament of holy matrimony and the celebration of the nuptial mass

i'm not sure how i feel about the green....

mcdol3 · January 2011

Our colors and green and yellow. Green being the main color of the wedding.

Riss91 · January 2011

I think there are a lot of design elements going on and it would look more elegant if you droped one or two. I think if you have the green design in the background plus the floral edge on the left plus your monogram in the corner plus the cross at the top it's very distracting.

I'd likely keep the background one color, move your monogram elsewhere (like on the response cards or something) and then center the section about the reception. And maybe replicate the left side border on the right as well. Let me know if you need help - I've designed invitations for mine, my sister's and my best friend's weddings.

waitingformay · January 2011

Is your reception at the same place? If not, where are you putting reception info?

I might take the info about the reception off or condense it - like reception following at five o'clock in the evening. I think the way it is takes away from the formality of the invitation. Just my opinion.

mcdol3 · January 2011

Reception is at a different place.
We are going to be including another paper with maps and the reception address on it. Plus the RSVP information.
Would you take off the Reception info from the invite and only include it separately?

I'll send the changes you guys suggested to my sister and see what she comes back with.
thank you!

Calypso1977 · January 2011

i like the floral border. what about keeping that for the yellow and green and dropping the busy background and just going with a cream background?

reception info is usually included on a separate card. however, ours was on our invite we just separated it with a scrolly line - i didnt want to pay for reception cards.

newlyseliski · January 2011

I really like your wording! I might borrow it

Your colors make me happy and looking forward to spring... The girls above had some good suggestions. Call me crazy, but you could do something fun and invert the colors with a solid green background, white text and the yellow flowers bordering the text? Then again, I'm nuts enough to base my invitation inspiration on this...

ring_pop · January 2011

I find the wording very awkward. You and your husband will be the only ones receiving the sacrament of holy matrimony that day, so it seems inappropriate to request the honour of someone's presence at the sacrament.

Really, you are requesting the honour of their presence at the nuptial mass. Alternatively, request the honour of their presence as you are united in the sacrament. Or as Calypso suggested, request the honour of their presence at the marriage.

Also... you are Canadian. Use the spelling "honour".

I agree that there's too much going on in the design for my liking. I'd at least drop the cross if not the monogram.

And since your reception is in a different venue, I'd take out the reception info all together and put it on a separate card.

Hope61 · January 2011

I agree with everything ring_pop said. (well, except that I didn't know you are Canadian and therefore should say "honour" lol) On our invitation we are saying
"My Parents Names
request the honor of your presence
at the nuptial Mass at which their daughter
MyName
and
HisName
son of his parents' names
will be united in the Sacrament of Holy Matrimony"
etc. etc.

Yours of course would be worded a little differently since both parents are paying.

I do like the flowers and especially the green background, but again, I would drop the cross and probably the monogram and reception info too.

clearheavens · January 2011

Ditto what ring_pop and KatieAnne18 said.

waitingformay · January 2011

If you're already doing a reception card, I would just put the reception info there.

mcdol3 · January 2011

Ok, so my sister made a few changes last night.
I asked her to take off the reception piece after she sent me this one.
I'm going to get her to fade the cross a little and drop it down so it's behind our names.
Thoughts?

(Thank you so much ladies.)

Calypso1977 · January 2011

i would put your names in between the four lines of text.... so after "children" comes your names, then the final two lines below your names.

mcdol3 · January 2011

That would make sense. lol

mcdol3 · January 2011

Ok last one, I promise.
These are the final changes my sister made.
What do you think?
She adjusted the wording, moved the cross down, removed the reception information, added more flowers to the side and removed the background.

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