Proof reading help!

Re: Proof reading help!

• rachel801231

  

  February 2012

  Sorry it looks so smooshed together.  It's not that way on the programs

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• w+c3 member

  

  February 2012

  In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-club-boards_march-2012-weddings_proof-reading-help?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding Club BoardsForum:955e4823-0be1-44ef-9ee7-99a63794e103Discussion:221f8c19-297d-4bc2-a70b-d06a422bffdbPost:6cab38ef-c241-4f1e-830c-21c09049c032">Proof reading help!</a>:
  [QUOTE]I have been working on our programs and I have a thank you part.  Would you ladies mind reading it and telling me what/if I need to change in it.  Thanks! Special Thanks On this day of happiness we are so honored and blessed to have each of you here with us as we begin our new lives together. <strong>We are truly blessed to be surrounded by all of you and thank you to adding to the joyful spirit of our wedding day.</strong>   A special thanks to our parents for their continued love and support throughout every step of our lives.   You all hold a very special place in our hearts.
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  This just doesn't flow. My mind gets tripped up on it reading it. Plus it is sort of repetitive since in the statement before you said: we are so honored and blessed to have each of you here with us.
  
  How about something along the lines of: We feel so fortunate to have such amazing family and friends in our lives and it means the world to us to be surrounded by your outpour of love and happiness on our special day.

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• cu97tiger member

  

  February 2012

  In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-club-boards_march-2012-weddings_proof-reading-help?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding Club BoardsForum:955e4823-0be1-44ef-9ee7-99a63794e103Discussion:221f8c19-297d-4bc2-a70b-d06a422bffdbPost:6cab38ef-c241-4f1e-830c-21c09049c032">Proof reading help!</a>:
  [QUOTE]I have been working on our programs and I have a thank you part.  Would you ladies mind reading it and telling me what/if I need to change in it.  Thanks! Special Thanks On this day of happiness we are so honored and blessed to have each of you here with us as we begin our new lives together. We are truly blessed to be surrounded by all of you and thank you to adding to the joyful spirit of our wedding day.   A special thanks to our parents for their continued love and support throughout every step of our lives.   You all hold a very special place in our hearts.
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  I think it sounds good except that it should be 'thank you FOR adding' not 'thank you TO adding'

  

  
  

  

  
  

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• cu97tiger member

  

  February 2012

  In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-club-boards_march-2012-weddings_proof-reading-help?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding Club BoardsForum:955e4823-0be1-44ef-9ee7-99a63794e103Discussion:221f8c19-297d-4bc2-a70b-d06a422bffdbPost:e197a562-3e47-481a-9526-bc5ff3dc0dbf">Re: Proof reading help!</a>:
  [QUOTE]In Response to Proof reading help! : This just doesn't flow. My mind gets tripped up on it reading it. Plus it is sort of repetitive since in the statement before you said: we are so honored and blessed to have each of you here with us. How about something along the lines of: We feel so fortunate to have such amazing family and friends in our lives and it means the world to us to be surrounded by your outpour of love and happiness on our special day.
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  If you use this, it should be outpouring, not outpour.

  

  
  

  

  
  

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• rachel801231

  

  February 2012

  Thanks for your help ladies!

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