Printing own invites..how is my wording

Re: Printing own invites..how is my wording

• Maggie0829 member

  

  June 2014 edited June 2014

  
  

  
  

  tasha682 said:

  because you have shared in our lives by your friendship and love, we   LaTasha Kelly & Kevin Gidrey   together with our parents invite you to share the beginning of our new life together when we exchange marriage vows on saturday, the thirtieth of may two thousand fifteen at five o’clock Kukua Beach Club Punta Cana, Dominican Republic   A celebration with dinner, drinks and dancing to follow                  Beach formal attire

   

  Sorry but this is just way to wordy.  And you really shouldn't mention attire on your invite.  The fact that your wedding is taking place in Punta Cana at a beach resort is more then enough information for your guests to dress appropriately.  Also, what exactly is beach formal attire?  Beach and formal are not things that really go together.

  
  

  How about this simple wording?

  
  

  Together with their parents

  
  

  Bride

  and

  Groom

  
  

  request the pleasure of your company

  at their wedding

  
  

  Saturday, the thirtieth of May

  two thousand fifteen

  at five o'clock

  
  

  Kukua Beach Club

  Punta Cana, Dominican Republic

  
  

  Reception to follow

  
  

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• LondonLisa member

  

  June 2014

  Ditto Maggie- cut words and definitely do not have attire on your invites. The invitation style and wording dictates the formality of the event, and as such if it is a formal wedding it should be in the third person. Beach formal also isn't a thing.

  
  

  Also, the year should never be listed on an invitation as they are obviously for that year (no one sends invitations a year in advance).

  
  

  Also, the first few lines' syntax is very awkward. Maggie's wording is better (and more formal) but if you want to include some more of your language flourishes, I would say:

  
  

  
  

  Together with their parents

  LaTasha Kelly

  &

  Kevin Gidrey

   

  Request the pleasure of your company

  at the beginning of their new life together

  when they exchange marriage vows

  on saturday, the thirtieth of may
  

   at five o’clock

  Kukua Beach Club

  Punta Cana, Dominican Republic

   

  Reception to follow

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• ScoutF member

  

  June 2014

  I really hope those aren't you real names. And I'd go with Maggie's wording.

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• CMGragain member

  

  June 2014 edited June 2014

  The wedding invitation is a simple note to the guests from the hosts, stating who, what, when, and where - not WHY.  It is rude to tell you guests how to dress, unless your wedding is black tie.  There is no such thing as "beach formal attire".
  
  

  Together with their parents

  
  

  Bride

  and

  Groom

  
  

  request the pleasure of your company

  as they are united in marriage
  

  
  

  Saturday, the thirtieth of May

  two thousand fifteen

  at five o'clock

  
  

  Kukua Beach Club

  Punta Cana, Dominican Republic

  
  

  Reception to follow

  
  
  

  

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