Invitation Wording

Re: Invitation Wording

• banana468 member

  

  November 2014

  Honestly, that sounds like the wording for a save the date. The traditional way just makes things easier:
  
  The honour of your presence/pleasure of your company is requested
  at the wedding of
  
  Keri Middle Last
  
  to
  
  Edwin Middle Last
  
  Saturday, the first of November
  
  two thousand and fourteen
  
  at half after four o'clock
  
  Location
  
  City, State
  
  

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• CMGragain member

  

  November 2014 edited November 2014

  Keri&EdwinWedding said:

  I'm having troubles with exactly how to word the beginning of the invitation. This is what I have right now:

  
  

  Keri and Edwin 

  are getting married!

  Please join us in celebrating
  

  and so on...
  

  
  

  My issue is that we are saying "Keri and Edwin are getting married" as in the person writing the invitation is talking about us. But then it says "Please join us in celebrating" as if we are the ones writing it. Two different perspectives. 

  
  

  I know this can be an easy fix by saying "Please join them in celebrating" or "Please join the celebration" but it just doesn't sound as...cute...or personable. Does it sound silly to have it in two different perspectives? Or should I change the celebration line? I can't reformat it too much because the design of the invitation has me a bit limited (and I already love the design so I'd rather not change it). Our names need to be at the top (bigger and different font).

  
  

  Thanks so much for any advise!
  

  
  

  -Keri

  The couple NEVER directly invites people to their own wedding ceremony.  Your names cannot be at the top.  This is very bad form.  If you are hosting your own wedding, the wording should be in the passive tense, as in Banana's example..
  There is nothing wrong with non-traditional wording, but it must conform to etiquette.  It is rude to openly invite people to your own wedding.  It is like saying "I am throwing a party in my own honor, and I am inviting you."
  Wedding invitations are not supposed to be "cute or personable"!  They are a simple message from the hosts to the guests, telling them who, what, when and where.  "Cute" has nothing to do with it, and I find it odd on a wedding invitation.
  You didn't post your entire wording, but it is not at all clear that this is a wedding invitation.  It sounds like wording for a celebration party for a marriage that has already taken place.
  

  

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• CMGragain member

  

  November 2014 edited November 2014

  The pleasure of your company is requested
  at the marriage of
  Keri Full Name
  and
  Edwin Full Name
  Day, date
  time o'clock
  Venue Name
  Address
  City, State
  
  Reception to follow
  

  

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• [Deleted User] member

  

  November 2014

  CMGragain said:

  Keri&EdwinWedding said:

  I'm having troubles with exactly how to word the beginning of the invitation. This is what I have right now:

  
  

  Keri and Edwin 

  are getting married!

  Please join us in celebrating
  

  and so on...
  

  
  

  My issue is that we are saying "Keri and Edwin are getting married" as in the person writing the invitation is talking about us. But then it says "Please join us in celebrating" as if we are the ones writing it. Two different perspectives. 

  
  

  I know this can be an easy fix by saying "Please join them in celebrating" or "Please join the celebration" but it just doesn't sound as...cute...or personable. Does it sound silly to have it in two different perspectives? Or should I change the celebration line? I can't reformat it too much because the design of the invitation has me a bit limited (and I already love the design so I'd rather not change it). Our names need to be at the top (bigger and different font).

  
  

  Thanks so much for any advise!
  

  
  

  -Keri

  The couple NEVER directly invites people to their own wedding ceremony.  Your names cannot be at the top.  This is very bad form.  If you are hosting your own wedding, the wording should be in the passive tense, as in Banana's example..
  There is nothing wrong with non-traditional wording, but it must conform to etiquette.  It is rude to openly invite people to your own wedding.  It is like saying "I am throwing a party in my own honor, and I am inviting you."
  Wedding invitations are not supposed to be "cute or personable"!  They are a simple message from the hosts to the guests, telling them who, what, when and where.  "Cute" has nothing to do with it, and I find it odd on a wedding invitation.
  You didn't post your entire wording, but it is not at all clear that this is a wedding invitation.  It sounds like wording for a celebration party for a marriage that has already taken place.
  

  I agree with the bolded.  This is basically what I told you on the other thread you started about this.  In this one case be traditional, not cute.  Your invitations themselves can be as cute as you want, feel free to coat them in pictures of Bunnies and Kitties, but the wording should be clear.

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