Ceremony and Vow Ideas
nanaphyllis
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We are having a western themed vow renewal and I wrote this blessing, but I am wondering if it is ok
Dear heavenly Father, we thank you for lassoing ____and _____s' hearts and setting them on the trail together as husband and wife.
At times they have had a hard row to hoe, but through you they have found strength and comfort in each other, through a simple touch or gentile smile. Confident that in the end, things would pan out.
Today we pray that they may continue to look upon each other with the same warmth and compassion that first sparked the love in their hearts, and gave them the hankering to say "I do."
_____ and _____, may your trail be long, the storms be few, and the grass be green; and may you continue to grow in your faith, hope, and love, for each other, your family and friends, and in the Lord. We ask this through Jesus Christ, Amen.
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Maggie0829 Ravens & Bohs & Crabs & O's
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ohannabelle
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I unofficially deem nanaphyllis the best new poster of the day, and would like to point out to others that yes, it's possible to consider and accept honest criticism without interpreting it as a personal attack.nanaphyllis said:That's what I was afraid of...it was fun to write but I think a rewrite is needed...thanks for your honesty
Here we see that Nanaphyllis is concerned about delivering a good quality piece of work, but not concerned about defending a fragile ego, and that was a pleasant break from the never ending tantrum throwing I've seen lately.What a nice breath of fresh air.(I think, in your final paragraph, if you simply substitute the word "road" for trail, that part lives, and has nice country symbols that aren't the top. Storms, green grass, etc. those are fine.Get rid of the colloquialisms. Hankering, lasso, hard row to hoe.....and replace them with simple, honest language. Then it will read naturally, and not contrived-cute. It's almost right, just needs a little polishing. It will be western because you are, honestly and naturally, without trying.)
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That's what I was afraid of...it was fun to write but I think a rewrite is needed...thanks for your honesty
Wow! I'm impressed that you took Maggie's constructive criticism as it was intended.
For your ceremony, you could choose a reading from Laura Ingalls Wilder
http://www.goodreads.com/author/quotes/5300.Laura_Ingalls_Wilder
But keep the vows simple and clear. No need to toss in words and figures of speech that sound western.
I googled 'Old West love poems and found this gem:
I'm not familiar with the author, but you'll notice the words aren't about lassoing and getting hitched. I think I love this poem about a lifetime of love.