DIY Wedding Invitation

alhaley88 · June 2015

So I have created an invitation on Published. We want something simple but still formal. Is the wording acceptable for an invitation? Should I make it more formal? Any suggestions are welcome! Thanks!

Edit: typo on invite.

doeydo · June 2015

You might get more help with wording on the Invitations Board (http://forums.theknot.com/categories/wedding-boards_invites-paper)

CMGragain · June 2015

I'm glad I noticed your post. I don't usually hang out on the DIY board.

A wedding invitation has to clearly state who, what, when and where. Your wording fails on the "who". You need your full names on your invitation. It also fails on the "what". Nowhere in the text do you invite anyone to anything. This is an announcement, not an invitation.
The most important thing in wording a wedding invitation is who is hosting your wedding. It appears that the two of you are hosting your wedding yourselves. Is this correct? If so, then this wording is rude because you are inviting people to a party (wedding) being given in your own honor. This is a no--no.
Only the first word, and then proper nouns should be capitalized.

Here is an example of traditional wording IF you are hosting your own wedding:

The pleasure of your company is requested (This is the invitation line)
at the marriage of                                        (What)
Bride's Full Name                                        (Who)
and
Groom's Full Name
Sunday, the fourth of September                   (When)
two thousand sixteen
at five o'clock (This is afternoon, not evening.)
The Name Hotel
Street Address                                            (Where)
Indianapolis, Indiana

Reception to follow

This is as brief and informative as possible. Isn't it a little early to be printing your invitations? Things can change over a 15 month time period.