Writers Block for Vows

Re: Writers Block for Vows

• OurWildKingdom member

  

  May 2016 edited May 2016

  I really like it. I think you're definitely on the right track. This is my favorite line: "I promise to keep your life exciting and make marriage our biggest adventure, not our final adventure."
  
  P.S. You sound in much better spirits than you were a couple weeks ago.
  

  

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• Jen4948 member

  

  May 2016

  I would lose the Netflix line, but everything else sounds good.
  
  Keep your vows about real promises you can keep.  Your vows are not the time for humor or cutesiness.

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• bleve0821 member

  

  May 2016

  My favorite is the last line, "And remember, you are not alone."  But to that, I might add, "You will never be alone."
  

  
  

  "And when they use our atoms to make new lives, they won’t just be able to take one, they’ll have to take two, one of you and one of me..."
  

  --Philip Pullman

  
  

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• kvruns member

  

  May 2016

  Jen4948 said:

  I would lose the Netflix line, but everything else sounds good.
  
  Keep your vows about real promises you can keep.  Your vows are not the time for humor or cutesiness.

  
  agreed

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• SP29 member

  

  May 2016

  I agree about the Netflix line, but everything else I love. Particularly, "I promise to keep your life exciting and make marriage our biggest adventure, not our final adventure."
  
  
  
  

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• zerostarzombie member

  

  May 2016

  Thank you all so much! I was kind of not feeling the Netflix line after I wrote it. I appreciate it.
  
  And thank you so much, @OurWildKingdom

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• CMGragain member

  

  May 2016

  zerostarzombie said:

  I'm at a stand still for writing my vows. I've gotten the promise part and ending (I think?) down, but I'm having a really hard time putting my feelings into words. Here's what I have so far:
  
  I promise to support you when the world gets too hard and be the safe place you come home to.
  I promise to spend countless hours laughing with you while marathoning our latest netflix show.
  I promise to not sweat the small stuff, like laundry piles and sandwich crumbs.
  I promise to keep your life exciting and make marriage our biggest adventure, not our final adventure.
  And lastly, I promise to love you for not only this life, but the many lives we will live. And remember, you are not alone.
  
  
  Any feedback is much appreciated. Thank you! 
  
  
  

  I find the bolded a bit odd.  How about "I promise to love you for this lifetime"?
  

  

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