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what do you think....

mariaNryan mariaNryan
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in New Jersey

Of this invitation wording;

Lace and flowers and vows to make,

A bride and groom and wedding cake,

One thing remains before "I do"

an invitation especially for you!

Please join us along with our parents this day

as we say "I do"

On March 26, 2011 at 4:15pm

The Wykoff Reformed Church

580 Wyckoff Avenue

Wykoff, NJ 07451

Any recommendations to this???

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Re: what do you think....

  • smw42smw42 member
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    edited December 2011
    I would include the day of the week for March 26th. I even do this when writing the date for vendors- avoids any confusion!
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  • mariaNryan mariaNryan
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    edited December 2011
    thanks for the advice!!!!
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  • AnnPH424AnnPH424
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    edited December 2011

    Are you having a really casual wedding? The poem is cute but more for a save the date then a wedding invitation and your names aren't on here, how are you guests supposed to know who's wedding they are invited to? just my opinion

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  • mariaNryan mariaNryan
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    edited December 2011
    the names will be written at the top of the invite and the wedding isnt casual
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  • Laurms15Laurms15 member
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    edited December 2011
    Maybe put the names where it says "us and our parents"
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  • mariaNryan mariaNryan
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    edited December 2011
    do you think i should skip the poem and just put together with our parents???
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  • tvlirenetvlirene member
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    edited December 2011
    I'd skip the poem, jut my opinion.  It does sound like a save the date as opposed to a wedding invite.
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  • Laurms15Laurms15 member
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    edited December 2011
    The poem to me says casual garden wedding (no idea where I got garden from) but it doesn't sound to me like the most formal occasion. The wedding invite should be a clue to your guests as to what type of event it is.
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  • mariaNryan mariaNryan
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    edited December 2011
    ok thanks girls! I will prob not do a poem then and just keep it together with our parents
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  • maddie7maddie7 member
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    edited December 2011
    It's kind of "cute-sy" kindergartenish.
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  • uppereastgirluppereastgirl member
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    edited December 2011
    In Response to <a href="http://forums.weddings.com/Sites/Weddings/Pages/Main.aspx/local-wedding-boards_new-jersey_think?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Local%20Wedding%20BoardsForum:90Discussion:f2e6a163-d2f2-4171-ad69-a60525c87897Post:83e88d69-2f8a-41e6-8cf0-4d8f9173fde0">Re: what do you think....</a>:
    [QUOTE]do you think i should skip the poem and just put together with our parents???
    Posted by mariaNryan[/QUOTE]

    <div>I would.  The poem is super casual, and is much more cheesy save-the-date than wedding invitation.  I'm also not sure that it is the best wedding invitation poem out there (it seems weird to lump lace, flowers and vows as if they're all things that are "made" in the same sense, and then because you don't "make" a bride and groom, the next line is kind of just there because cake rhymes with make.  And invitations that are sent to lots of people are not "especially" for any one of them).  I think I would only like a wedding invitation poem where it was very clever and  the couple was very clever and quirky and the poem was customized to the clever, quirky couple. </div>
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  • mariaNryan mariaNryan
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    edited December 2011
    thanks girls i appreciate all your advice!!!!
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  • akmackayakmackay
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    edited December 2011
    yup... take out the poem and make sure to add your names.
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  • kwilkinson14kwilkinson14
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    edited December 2011
    I would take the poem out of the invite especially if it is a formal event. If you were really set on a poem you could always had it to the programs, favor, etc.
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  • DS0305DS0305 member
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    edited December 2011
    I definitely wouldn't use the poem especially if it isn't casual.  I searched online for invitation wording and picked what sounded the most formal without any corny lines.
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