Wedding Invitation Language
Would you ladies mind reading through my invitation language and give me your thoughts? I don't like the traditional formal language since that's not how we are or how we want our wedding to be. I'm wanting something fun. My fiance and I are hosting; however, our parents will probably be assisting hosts so we do want to include them in the language somehow. One of the things we loved about this venue was that between our outdoor wedding and reception, while we're taking photos our guests get a tour!
Because your love and friendship have made us who we are
And because you enjoy good wine, beer and celebratory foolery as much as we do…
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Me and Him, along with our loving parents,
Would love for you to join them at their garden party wedding
For a whimsically reverent celebration of love and adventure
As we vow to each other a lifetime of mischief and adventures together.
Date
Location and address
Ceremony begins at 5:30pm
Tour the Mansion after the Ceremony
Dinner begins at 7:00pm
Dinner will be followed by general merriment, a bonfire, and awkward but enthusiastic dancing!
Re: Wedding Invitation Language
Don't know how that web address got in there...wasn't there when I hit post.
Bride's Full Name
and
Groom's Full Name
request the pleasure of your company
at their garden party wedding
Day, date
half after five o'clock (5:30 PM is acceptable)
Location'
Address
City, State
Tour of the (Name) Mansion following ceremony
Reception
Seven o'clock
I don't mind unusual wording, but I think your invitation is way too complicated. Some people might be confused exactly what they are being invited to attend. The focus should be your wedding, not the party afterwards.
Wedding invitations are usually in the third person. You have mixed this in your sample, using both "we" and "they", which is grammatically incorrect. Invitations must state who, what, when, where - not why or how. Alternative wording is fine, but you must be clear.
Are you having a program printed? This would be a good place to use some of the flowery language and fun thoughts.
edit: "would love for you to join us at our -- wedding" sounds like you are asking the guest to be your officiant, and to join the two of you together.
Save your "personality" for other elements of the wedding-not the invitation wording.
Just me?