Proofread my invitation wording?

ashleyep

I *think* this is all correct, etiquette wise, but let me know if any of it is not. I used the Crane's website as a reference.

My invitation is all in small caps, so upper/lower case is irrelevant (fortunately!)

Mr. and Mrs. [Dad's first] [LastName]

Request the honour of your presence

at the marriage of their daughter

[First] [Middle]

to

[First] [Middle] [Last]

Saturday, the second of August

Two Thousand Fourteen

at half after five o'clock

[Church Name]

[Street Address]

[City],[State]

Reception to follow

Then my reception card is as follows:

Please join us for dinner and dancing

following the ceremony

[Venue Name]

[address]

[City], [State]

For more information:

www.ourwebsite.com

And my response card:

The favour of your response

is requested by the twelfth of july

M_______________

____ Accepts  ______ Declines

Please initial the entree choice for each guest:

________ Sausage and Apple Stuffed Chicken

________ Pesto crusted Salmon Filet

People with dietary restrictions know to mention them, right? I can definitely get vegetarian/gluten free/kosher meals/whatever, but it's not specifically a third entree choice. I don't need to mention anything about mentioning dietary restrictions, do I?

singinchick13

I don't think you have to at all, but it might be nice to include something if you are worried that people will not just mention it freely. We are including a space for dietary restrictions on our reply cards, but we also will not be including a meal choice so that leaves some room to play with.

CMGragain

Mr. and Mrs. [Dad's first] [LastName]

request the honour of your presence

at the marriage of their daughter

[First] [Middle]

to

Mr. [First] [Middle] [Last]

Saturday, the second of August

two thousand fourteen

at half after five o'clock

[Church Name]

[Street Address]

[City],[State]

Then my reception card is as follows:

Reception
Half after six o'clock

[Venue Name]

[address]

[City], [State]

For more information:

www.ourwebsite.com

And my response card:

The favour of your response

is requested by the twelfth of July

M_______________

____ Accepts  ______ Declines

Please initial the entree choice for each guest:

________ Sausage and apple stuffed chicken

________ Pesto crusted salmon filet

I do not understand why you are using the all lower case font.  It will look weird, at least to me.  Your wording is very good, except that you do not need to use "reception to follow" on the invitation when the information is on a separate reception card.  Your groom should have the title, "Mr." before his name.  Good job!

huskypuppy14

The "two thousand fourteen" should be lowercase, but I realize for your font it won't matter (for other brides!)  

Don't mention that the reception includes dinner and dancing (not sure the reason, but I don't think it's etiquette approved), just say Reception.

ashleyep

CMGragain said:

Mr. and Mrs. [Dad's first] [LastName]

request the honour of your presence

at the marriage of their daughter

[First] [Middle]

to

Mr. [First] [Middle] [Last]

Saturday, the second of August

two thousand fourteen

at half after five o'clock

[Church Name]

[Street Address]

[City],[State]

Then my reception card is as follows:

Reception
Half after six o'clock

[Venue Name]

[address]

[City], [State]

For more information:

www.ourwebsite.com

And my response card:

The favour of your response

is requested by the twelfth of July

M_______________

____ Accepts  ______ Declines

Please initial the entree choice for each guest:

________ Sausage and apple stuffed chicken

________ Pesto crusted salmon filet

I do not understand why you are using the all lower case font.  It will look weird, at least to me.  Your wording is very good, except that you do not need to use "reception to follow" on the invitation when the information is on a separate reception card.  Your groom should have the title, "Mr." before his name.  Good job!

It's an all uppercase font, not lowercase. I could change it, that's just the one that they had for this inviation design and I liked the way it looked.

Thank you I've been lurking on here long enough that I thought I had everything mostly correct.

tammym1001

@CMGRagain - I'm just curious about the Mr. in front of the groom's name. I've never heard that before. Why does he get Mr. before his name, but the bride doesn't get Miss before his. I thought if you used titles they were to be used for everyone.

CMGragain

The bride doesn't get a title because she does not use her full name.  That is covered by her parents' names, and she is referred to as "their daughter".  They get titles.
The reverse is also true.  If the groom's parents are hosting the wedding, then the groom does not get a title, but the bride does.

Mr. and Mrs. John  Groomsparents
request the pleasure of your company
at the marriage of
Miss Bride's Full Name
to their son
Groom's first middle
(etc.)

tammym1001

CMGragain said:

The bride doesn't get a title because she does not use her full name.  That is covered by her parents' names, and she is referred to as "their daughter".  They get titles.
The reverse is also true.  If the groom's parents are hosting the wedding, then the groom does not get a title, but the bride does.

Mr. and Mrs. John  Groomsparents
request the pleasure of your company
at the marriage of
Miss Bride's Full Name
to their son
Groom's first middle
(etc.)

Thank you! I was confused. So if the bride and groom are hosting do they both get titles?

CMGragain

In the old days, yes.  Today's brides generally don't want to use them.

CMGragain

GlitterWitch22 said:

@CmGragain  Will you check and/or correct my bolded wording for these two sections?  

The honor/honour of your presence is requested

at the marriage of

Sally Sue Smith

and

John Jacob Jinglehiemerschmidt

Saturday, the fourth of October

two thousand fourteen / two thousand and fourteen

at half after ten o'clock

Either choice is fine with the wording that I left.  It is your personal preference.  I did correct the time.  I am assuming that this is a church wedding?

CMGragain

Yes, it does matter.  "The honor/honour of your presence" is only used for church weddings.  For a wedding that is held somewhere else it is this:

The pleasure of your company is requested
at the marriage of
Bride's Full Name
and
Groom's Full Name (etc.)

huskypuppy14

Correct me if I'm wrong, but I believe putting in the morning/ afternoon/ evening, is optional, but not wrong if you do include it.  Now, it's more likely that your wedding is in the morning if you didn't include it, but it's not improbable to have a ceremony at 10 in the evening (though highly unlikely).

CMGragain

It is fine to include it, but not necessary.  I usually edit invitations down to the minimum.  I like them short and sweet!