XP Please help proof my invites

carpediem27

*Invite:
The harmony of love
meets with the melody of life
to create our beautiful
love song

Please join us to celebrate
the wedding of

Katie Marie ******
and Marshall William *******

on Friday, the twenty-fourth of August
two thousand twelve
at six o'clock in the evening
at The Grecian Center Park Pavillion
16300 Dix Toledo
Southgate, Michigan


*Reception card:
To help us celebrate,
please join us for the reception,
beginning at six thirty in the evening,
located in the
Apollo Room
inside The Grecian Center.
(Entry located around the building from the parking lot,
transportation will be available for those needing assistance.)

Dinner to be served at
seven thirty in the evening.

RSVP:
The favor of your response is requested by
August 3, 2012

______________________________________________________________
_____ Accepts
_____ Declines

libby2483

I'm personally not a fan of little poems and saying on invitations, but if this fits with the style of your wedding, and it is something that you like, I would say go for it.  Overall, the invitation looks good, but it is a tad awkward because invitations are usually written in third person (their) rather than first person (our, we).  I made a few bolded changes below and deleted a couple of things as well. The harmony of love
meets with the melody of life
to create a beautiful 
love song The pleasure of your company is requestedat the marriage of 
OR 
You are invited to celebrate the wedding of
Katie Marie ******
and Marshall William *******Friday, the twenty-fourth of August
two thousand twelve
at six o'clock in the evening
The Grecian Center Park Pavillion
16300 Dix Toledo 
Southgate, Michigan


*Reception card: Please join us for the reception
at half past six o'clock  Dinner will be served at half past seven o'clock
Apollo Room
The Grecian Center
Entry located around the building from the parking lot.
Transportation will be available for those needing assistance.
RSVP:
The favor of your response is requested by
the third of AugustM____________________________
_____ Accepts
_____ Declines

bridejl

I agree with the changes libby made. The original wording sounded a bit, well, wordy...Otherwise looks good!