Vows. First Draft.

LandV

V, there are many things that I have learned about you and our love over the last five years. I have learned that you are loyal; You easily make friends; You are the type of man who knows I cheat at phase 10 so I can always win and never says a word. You give more than you take. You work hard. You don’t fight dirty. You know all my flaws and still, you love me.

I’ve learned that I could not live a life without your love.

I’ve learned that friends and lovers can be synonymous; that respect has to be freely given; and that after five years love becomes a choice.

You are my love, my friend, my partner. Because of these things:

Whether we are sick or healthy, I will choose you.

Whether we are rich or poor, I will choose you.

Whether we are happy or angry, I will choose you.

Whether we are together or apart, I will choose you.

Whether we are fighting or living in peace, I will choose you.

Your desires will be my desires; your dreams will be my dreams.

I will choose you until the day I day. I will love you, honor you, respect you, live with you, and be proud of you. You are my love, my friend, my partner, and now you are my family.

morenachica110

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[QUOTE]V, there are many things that I have learned about you and our love over the last five years. I have learned that you are loyal; You easily make friends; <strong>You are the type of man who knows I cheat at phase 10 so I can always win and never says a word</strong>. You give more than you take. You work hard. You don’t fight dirty. You know all my flaws and still, you love me. I’ve learned that I could not live a life without your love. I’ve learned that friends and lovers can be synonymous; that respect has to be freely given; and that after five years love becomes a choice. You are my love, my friend, my partner. Because of these things: Whether we are sick or healthy, I will choose you. Whether we are rich or poor, I will choose you. Whether we are happy or angry, I will choose you. Whether we are together or apart, I will choose you. Whether we are fighting or living in peace, I will choose you. Your desires will be my desires; your dreams will be my dreams. I will choose you until the day I day. I will love you, honor you, respect you, live with you, and be proud of you. You are my love, my friend, my partner, and now you are my family.
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</div><div>I like it but I think the bolded needs reworded. I get the gist of what you're saying, but I have to read it a few times. But I think everything else is great! =)

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Tanq&Tonic

I think they're very nice.  I agree with PP that the bolded sentence is odd.  I still don't quite get it.

Thinking purely from a spoken / listened perspective, I think your repetition of "I will choose you" 5 times is possibly a bit too much.  It will feel redundant by the 3rd or 4th time.  Can you condense those down into just two?

Also, I'm assuming it's a typo, but near the end it should day "day I die" not "day I day".

LandV

Thanks Ladies. I edited the typo and re worded the sentence.

sarah260

very beautiful  

mylyfe2012

i think it was really nice. your helping me out since my king decieded he wanted to write our own vows.....

RailWayWife

Very beautiful! Very inspiring. I love how you said "I will choose you" I wouldnt take any of those out. Love them!