Vows 2nd draft, opinons please (XP)

Buggles522

Jason,

I know God picked you just for me. He had you in mind for me all along. I love you so much. You’ve given me so much in our relationship. You’ve given me your friendship. I know I can tell you anything and you won’t judge me even if I’m having a blonde moment. You’ve given me your support. You’ve let me make my own choices even if they were bad ones.  You’ve given me love. You’ve loved me more than I knew I could be loved. Every day I think about how much you care for me and I’m just amazed that I have someone in my life like you that does love me as much as you do.  You’ve given me headaches. Yes we fight, and you drive me crazy sometimes, but I feel like that just makes our relationship stronger.  And most importantly you’ve given me the most precious thing in my life. You’ve given me our daughter Kadee. I love our daughter more than I even knew could be possible, and I love you even more for blessing me with her.

I love how safe I feel when you are with me. I love how you seem to make all my worries about life go away because I know we will be living it together. I love how you look at me in that way that lets me know you love me too. I love how you can make me laugh when I’m mad or sad. I love that you always bring me surprises even if it’s just a candy bar or my favorite fast food. I love that I can always be me with you no matter what. I love how hard you work for our family and you always find a way to make my dreams come true.  I love how you make me realize what’s important in life.  I love how for the first time in my life everything seems to falling in place and it’s all because of you; the love of my life.

Jason I promise to always love you. I promise to always be that shoulder for you to cry on. I promise I will follow you and stand by you wherever God leads you.  I promise to be the best wife and mother I can possibly be. I promise to be a Godly woman and to help raise our children with those same beliefs. I promise to give you that extra push when you need it. And I promise to support anything you ever want to do in life…….that isn’t too dangerous.  
                I love you and I’m so excited to make our little family official and continue to live and love with you and Kadee. 

scrpio421

It's much better than the first draft, but I feel like it's repetitive with the beginning of almost every sentence with "You've" or "I love". I feel like you could consolidate many of your sentences with an "and" instead of starting another "I love" sentence. You have 2 paragraphs of things you love about him, do you need 2?

I like your promises paragraph, I think it's sweet.

maxjury14

I think it is sweet and heartfelt but way too long!  If I was a guest I would have zoned out a little.  Maybe you could write a sweet note to him the morning of with all of the things you love about him listed.  Tell him how excited you are to see him at the end of the aisle and then have your MOH deliver it for you before the ceremony.  Then, only put a line or two about the things you love about him in your vows and get to the most important part more quickly...the promises you are making to him!

Just an idea.  But as long as it comes from the heart I am sure it will be great.  I just wanted to give you my honest reaction

Buggles522

wow really? I was thinking it was short so I added a bit more.I also wanted the repetativeness in it. It's meant to be a list more or less.
I'll get started on draft three....lol. Thanks for the opinions.

mandi921vh

It is a bit long, maybe shorten it a little...?

Otherwise I like them!