Invite wording proofing

pengy16

Its a small casual wedding so the wording isnt suppose to be extremely proper.
I have come to two options, which one would be better and is there any wording changes that should occur? Or is there certain pieces for either that would be better with other?

Option 1:

Join us on

October 27^th, 2012

For the marriage of

Bride Name

Groom Name

4 pm

Wedding Location

Addy

Baltimore, MD ZIP

Reception to follow in the Orientation Room

 Please find RSVP enclosed.

 

Option 2:

Please share in our Special Day as

Bride Name

•  
   and

Groom Name

 

Celebrate love of family and join hands in marriage

Saturday the 27^th of October 2012

At 4 p.m.

Ceremony and Reception at the Wedding Location

•  
      Addy     Baltimore, Maryland ZIP

Reception to follow immediately after the ceremony in Orientation Room.

RSVP Card enclosed.

ktelizabeth86

Option 2:

Please share in our Special Day as

Bride Name

•  
  and

Groom Name

 

Celebrate love of family and join hands in marriage

Saturday the 27^th of October 2012

At 4 p.m.

Ceremony and Reception at the Wedding Location
    Addy

•  
      Baltimore, Maryland ZIP

Reception to follow immediately after the ceremony in Orientation Room.

RSVP Card enclosed.


I prefer option #2 but I think the lines that I bolded and underlined above sound a little strange. I would completely take out the first one "Ceremony and Reception at the Wedding Location". I would also completely take out "RSVP Card enclosed". The other one I would change to "Reception to follow" or if you really have to specify "Reception to follow in the Orientation Room".

Just my 2 cents lol. 

mrshall1027

I'm not a big fan of "Celebrate love of family".  I had something similar and someone pointed out that it sounded like a hippie love fest and ever since then, it hasn't sat right with me.

Anyway, I prefer the first one and I would write it out like:

Please join us

For the marriage of

Bride Name

and

Groom Name

Saturday, October 27^th, 2012

4 pm in the afternoon

Wedding Location

Addy

Baltimore, MD

Reception to follow

 

I took out what PP suggested with the reception room and the rsvp card.  I also removed the zip code in the address.  I added "in the afternoon" after the time just for visual balance, but you can leave it out if you don't want it.

pengy16

"Celebrate love of family": I wanted something that says our families are combining. Is there a better way to word that?

It doesnt need to specify the Room, it was in a couple of examples I looking at so I wasnt sure if I could just say reception to follow since the ceremony and reception are in the same location, ceremony will be outside, reception inside the venue.
The designer of my invites generally puts the RSVP enclosed on all her examples so thats why I added it.

brainybrunette

I agree with ystaalenburg.  Except that I would word the time as 4 o'clock in the afternoon.  4 pm in the aftenoon is redundant.  

mrshall1027

Oh yeah, 4 o'clock in the afternoon is better.  I missed that.

You can say something like:

Together with their families

Brides Name

and 

Grooms Name

request the pleasure of your company

as the join their hands in marriage.

or

request the pleasure of your company

at the celebration of their wedding

TheSlowskys

I don't care for the wording of #2, but I would make a couple tweaks to #1 just using more traditional wording (I'd want the names before the date).  Also, make sure to spell out MD.

I would put "reception immediately following ceremony" or "Reception to follow" I think that you don't need to say the room necessarily (I've seen this done for ballrooms, but Orientation Room doesn't have the same ring).

Also, I dont think you need to put that the RSVP is enclosed.  They can figure that out.