Invitation Wording Proofing

angeepangee

Hello ladies! Could you please take a look at the invitation wording I have and let me know if anything stands out as incorrect, etc? Thanks in advance!!

Mr. and Mrs. Bride Parents

request the honor of your presence

at the Nuptial Mass uniting their daughter

First Middle

to

Groom Full Name

 

son of Mr. and Mrs. Groom Parents
in the Sacrament of Holy Matrimony

on Saturday, the date of month

Two thousand twelve

at half after three o’clock in the afternoon

at

Chapel

Address

bibliophile2010

Looks ok.

Technically speaking, the mass doesn't unite you. You will be united by one another at the mass. A grammar geek like me and etiquette gurus aren't thrilled by it, but most people won't notice or care. We used "Nuptial Mass where ____ and ____ will be united in the Sacrament of Holy Matrimony" to avoid it, but I know it sounds clunkier. Calypso also has a great alternative that I'm sure you can find if you go scrolling.

Riss91

bibli is right about the "uniting". A similar option:

Mr. and Mrs. Bride Parents

request the honor of your presence

at the Nuptial Mass of

First Middle

 

and

Groom Full Name

 

son of Mr. and Mrs. Groom Parents
as they are united in
in the Sacrament of Holy Matrimony

on Saturday, the date of month

Two thousand twelve

at half after three o’clock in the afternoon

at

Chapel

Address

Calypso1977

yes, as others said, the mass does not unite you.  it is said in your honor.

you could use:

"Mr. and Mrs. Brides parents request the honor of your presence at the marriage of their daughter, first middle, and mr. first middle, son of mr. and mrs. grooms parents, in the sacrament of holy matrimony and the celebration of the nuptial mass."

traditionally, the grooms parents names never went on the invitation; that was reserved for the wedding announcements.  it defintiely makes the invitation wordier and awkward, but many are putting the grooms parents on now - but its its not technically proper etiquette wise. 

angeepangee

Thank you all for your input!! I am definitely happy that I posted it here to get your feedback!! Thanks again