I am an unintentional overachiever

Spunky414

I'm generally a really bad procrastinator especially when it comes to writing. FI and I having a friend marry us so we are writing our own ceremony and vows. In order to prevent feverish scribbling the night before the wedding I started working on my vows tonight since our dog is freaking out at a thunderstorm and there's nothing on tv but infomercials. I ended up writing my vows and would like some feedback since now I have a whopping 286 days to tweek them.

Jeremy, you are the most ridiculous person I have ever met. You are also the most respectful, kind, clever and warm. I am honored to spend the rest of my life with you. You have taught me how to love purely without obligation or conditions. There’s something about the way you always know my motivations and feelings that will never cease to surprise me and just further endear you to me. You compliment my strengths and build up my weakness and I promise to do the same for you. You have given me faith in a future shared with an equal partner and I am so grateful. I promise to spend the rest of my life showing my gratitude. I promise to love you even when it is hard to and to remember this day when I don’t want to. I promise respect and support you and to listen more than I speak.  I promise to care for you in sickness, even when I think you are being a weenie. I promise to always have a sense of humor and a plunger ready. Overall, I promise to give you the best of myself even though I know you will love me at my worst.

ChiGirl2013

I like them!  As long as your wedding isn't super formal, they'll be just fine. 

The only thing I can say, and this is solely my personal opinion, is that I don't really care for vows that have inside jokes (ie the plunger.)  It may be special and funny to you, but it will leave your guests wondering "What's THAT all about?" when they should be paying attention to the rest of your vows/ceremony.  I know I'm on the OCD side, but not knowing WTH a plunger has to do with getting married would seriously bother me.  Others, however, may not care as much.

Spunky414

Oh it's so not an inside joke, the first time FI met my family he clogged toliet and anytime we go anywhere overnight with our friends it's guaranteed someone will. It's happened so much no one thinks it's embarassing anymore.

jesslynn1012

I think it's great, and I admire you for being able to write your own vows.  I am going to traditional route since we are getting married in the Catholic church (I think we'd have the opportunity to read "letters" to each other, but we'd be too self-conscious)...

The only part that has me stuck/questioning the wording is "build up my weaknesses"... I think it probably makes sense, but to me I think there might be a better wording or phrase.  I was thinking aloud, like maybe compensate for my weaknesses or strengthen my weakness or help me overcome my weakness... ???? IDK, I think if you leave it the same it would still be awesome, but that was the only place that I thought sounded like it could need work.  I am not trying to be nit-picky, just thought you'd appreciate some feedback of where I might tweak it:)  Good job!

Spunky414

jess, I think you're right, not nitpicky at all, at the very least strengths/weaknesses should both be pural. 

The traditional route is beautiful, I was raised in the Catholic Church and while I can't get behind the beliefs or policies the ritual is pretty. FI and I are going to a Catholic mass/wedding next month and I'm excited to check out the church architecture. 

vk2204

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[QUOTE]I'm generally a really bad procrastinator especially when it comes to writing. FI and I having a friend marry us so we are writing our own ceremony and vows. In order to prevent feverish scribbling the night before the wedding I started working on my vows tonight since our dog is freaking out at a thunderstorm and there's nothing on tv but infomercials. I ended up writing my vows and would like some feedback since now I have a whopping 286 days to tweek them. Jeremy, you are the most ridiculous person I have ever met. <strong>You are also the most respectful, kind, clever and warm.</strong> I am honored to spend the rest of my life with you. You have taught me how to love purely without obligation or conditions. There’s something about the way you always know my motivations and feelings that will never cease to surprise me and just further endear you to me. You compliment my strengths and build up my weakness and I promise to do the same for you. You have given me faith in a future shared with an equal partner and I am so grateful. I promise to spend the rest of my life showing my gratitude. I promise to love you even when it is hard to and to remember this day when I don’t want to. I promise respect and support you and to listen more than I speak.  I promise to care for you in sickness, even when I think you are being a weenie. I promise to always have a sense of humor and a plunger ready. Overall, I promise to give you the best of myself even though I know you will love me at my worst.
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I think it's great! The bolded is the only part I think you should tweak. I think it is the word WARM that makes me feel like it is incomplete. I am reading it as "you are also the most warm" - warm what? Maybe say, "you are also very warm, kind clever and respectful"? 

shipsinthenight

I was a little worried when I started reading that it was going to be all "I love you, you're so awesome because...," without any actual vows...But then half way in, there they were. Personally I think I would try to shorten the "why I love you" section and maybe lenthen the vow section. He knows why you love him, or he should. And you can write him a letter or card to that effect with his wedding gift, if you are doing them. I don't have a problem with the plunger, and I think, even though it's a little of an inside joke, every couple who's been together for any amount of time will understand the necessity of a plunger. We had a toilet overflow, which was my fault, within the first week of moving in together. I wasn't home, and fi had to take care of it all by himself. While we had to wash a lot of towels, he managed to keep the water confined to the hard floor without it getting to the carpet. Oh, I'm not crazy about your ending either...I think I would end with "finally" rather than "overall." Other than that, I think you're good to go. And like you said, you have a long time to fix it. I wrote my vows more than a year before the wedding, and I look at them every once and a while and tweek little things.