Help! Quick invite critique?

elliemonster2012

Can you ladies take a quick look at this for me?  Everything look ok?  I started using small caps and was getting thrown off!

TIA!

SlothGoals

The 'p' in presence doesn't need to be capitalized (I know you're using small caps, but it looks bigger than the letters next to it)

No comma after Saturday, and the numbers don't need to start with capitals (same reason as above)

There's something about the "request the honour of your presence at their wedding" that seems off to me, but I can't figure out why.

ETA: Figured it out! It should be "request the honour of your presence at their marriage"

elliemonster2012

Thanks girls!!!

SlothGoals

Ditto Kristan. 

You could also take out "in the afternoon", your guests won't think that you mean 3am

meg2marryshane

I would do:
request the honour of your presence at their wedding

on Saturday, the twenty-first of September
Two thousand and thirteen
at three o'clock in the afternoon

My invitation person sent me this to me:

From Crane's:

The time line can designate the time of day by using either “in the morning,” “in the afternoon” or “in the evening.” For most times it’s not usually necessary, since a wedding held at six o’clock is obviously being held in the evening.

Weddings held at eight, nine or ten o’clock are another matter, since they could be held in either the morning or evening. In those cases, a designation denoting the time of day is helpful.

In any event, you may always include the time of day if you find it aesthetically pleasing, and most older, traditional invitations do include it.

Isn’t it incorrect to use “and,” as in “Two thousand and one”?
In mathematics “and” denotes a decimal point, and since there’s no decimal point in the year “2001,” it may seem incorrect to use “and.” Wedding invitations, however, are not mathematical equations, so the use of “and” as a decimal point is irrelevant. On wedding invitations, “and” is used simply as a connective word.

Kristin789

When are we going to get back to the traditional construction of the year?

This year is Twenty Thirteen.

When people got married in 1999, they didn't put this on their invitations:
One Thousand Nine Hundred and Ninety-Nine

They put:
Nineteen Ninety-Nine

meg2marryshane

Agree with PP.  Twenty thirteen is wrong.

Isn’t it incorrect to use “and,” as in “Two thousand and one”?
In mathematics “and” denotes a decimal point, and since there’s no decimal point in the year “2001,” it may seem incorrect to use “and.”

Wedding invitations, however, are not mathematical equations, so the use of “and” as a decimal point is irrelevant. On wedding invitations, “and” is used simply as a connective word.