Invitation Wording

audubonbride2013

We are about to finalize our invitation wording and I wanted to see if this sounds ok.  We're not going with traditional wording (neither us or our parents like traditional wording).  Here's what we came up with:

Together with their parents

My First Middle Last Name

and

FI First Middle Last Name

invite you to share and celebrate

their wedding

Saturday, the tenth of August

two thousand thirteen

at half past two in the afternoon

Venue

Street Address

City, State

Does the wording sound ok?

Also, for the reply is it accepts/declines or accept/decline?

itzMS

Sure that seems fine.

I think "Accepts" and "Declines" sounds better going over it in my head...I really don't think that's a big deal though.

Peavy

I don't care for "share and celebrate."  I would change it to "celebrate with them as they are married."  The way you have it worded now, it sounds like you are already married and the invitation is only for the reception.  Change "their wedding" to something like "as they are married," "as they are joined in marriage" or something similary to indicate that there is an actual ceremony.

For the response card, it is in the third person, just like the invitation, so accepts/declines.

audubonbride2013

Thanks for your help!  We did some more digging and I think we're going to change the wording to this:

Together with their parents

My First Middle Last Name

and

FI First Middle Last Name

invite you to share

in a celebration of love

as they join hands in marriage

Saturday, the tenth of August

two thousand thirteen

 half past two o'clock

Venue

Street Address

City, State

audubonbride2013

In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_invitation-wording-123?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:aa84fe33-14f8-4d34-896a-4eb9479a518bPost:e1574449-5c17-49c2-921a-acc7851af476">Re: Invitation Wording</a>:
[QUOTE]"Invite you to share in a celebration of love" bring images of a hippie love fest to mind.  I remember the '70s!  Please reconsider.
Posted by CMGr[/QUOTE]

<div>HAHA Thanks for the tip.  I didn't even think of that.</div>