Invite wording - need help

linzcw04

Hey girls....I need your help. Here is my invite wording - should it be "at" instead of "for"??? Do I need to put anything about attire? (we are having a casual dress/party like wedding) Very non-formal


 It started with his smile, she said instantly she knew. Their love would last forever and now they’ll say, I Do! XXXXX and XXXX XXX kindly request your presencefor the celebration of love and marriage of their daughterBrides name
to
Grooms name
son of XXXXX and XXXXX XXXXFriday, the Eighteenth of June,Two Thousand TenSeven O’ Clock in the eveningLocationAddress
Dinner, Drinks and Dancing to follow

tracy_k

Yes, it should say "at" instead of "for." Also, no need to capitalize the D in "I do."

You don't need a period at the end of the first line, as it makes the next line a sentence fragment. And I'd probably not spell out the date, or "O'clock in the evening" as that is usually indicative of a more formal event.

Yes, I am a grammar nerd.

It started with his smile, she said instantly she knew

Their love would last forever and now they’ll say “I do!”

 

XXXXX and XXXXX

kindly request your presence
at the celebration of love and marriage of their daughter

 

Brides name
to
Grooms name

 

son of XXXXX and XXXXX

 

Friday, June 18, 2010
7:00 p.m.
Location
Address

Dinner, drinks and dancing to follow

[Deleted User]

I would use '"at" as well instead of "for". That is what we did.

kristinanddan

As someone already said, the D in do should be lower case. So should eighteenth, two, thousand, ten, seven, and o'clock.

And it is "at" not "for"

kissamary

Just a few suggestions.  Something about the first two lines seemed clunky.  It is probably because I usually don't do enjambment with rhyming lines.  I have a hard time getting them to read without effort.

When she first saw his smile, she instantly knewTheir love would last forever, and now they will say “I do!”
XXXXX and XXXX XXX kindly request your presence
at the marriage of their daughter
Bride’s name
to
Groom’s name
son of XXXXX and XXXXX XXXX
Friday, the eighteenth of June
two thousand and ten
seven o’ clock in the evening
Location
Address
Dinner, drinks and dancing to follow