Wedding Invitations & Paper

Invitation wording idea. Any changes?

I found this wording and believe I'm going to use it, is there any changes anyone can see that I should make to it first? Thanks!

God has led two lives
to take one path


Bride Name

And
Groom Name


together with their parents
invite you to witness their vows
as they begin their joyful journey
on the sixteenth of June
two thousand twelve
at six o'clock in the evening.
Lexington Palace
770 Lexington Avenue
Crest View, California

Re: Invitation wording idea. Any changes?

  • In Response to <a href="http://forums.theknot.com/Sites/theknot/Pages/Main.aspx/wedding-boards_invites-paper_invitation-wording-idea-any-changes?plckFindPostKey=Cat:Wedding%20BoardsForum:cd062f89-8272-496a-b0ab-225e1f87acecDiscussion:fe356ef7-5927-449c-8230-174fafe1b281Post:39cb0637-249a-4983-890d-7da7a01b4471">Invitation wording idea. Any changes?</a>:
    [QUOTE]I found this wording and believe I'm going to use it, is there any changes anyone can see that I should make to it first? Thanks! God has led two lives to take one path Bride Name And Groom Name together with their parents invite you to witness their vows as they begin their joyful journey on the sixteenth of June two thousand twelve at six o'clock in the evening. Lexington Palace 770 Lexington Avenue Crest View, California
    Posted by crystal024[/QUOTE]

    <div>I'm personally not a fan of nontraditional wording, but if that first block of text is used more as a graphic or design, then that's good. I'd keep the rest of your wording fairly standard though:</div><div style="text-align:center;">God has led two lives</div><div style="text-align:center;">to take one path</div><div style="text-align:center;">
    </div><div style="text-align:center;">Bride Full Name</div><div style="text-align:center;">and</div><div style="text-align:center;">Groom Full Name</div><div style="text-align:center;">
    </div><div style="text-align:center;">together with their parents</div><div style="text-align:center;">request the pleasure of your company</div><div style="text-align:center;">as they are united in marriage</div><div style="text-align:center;">
    </div><div style="text-align:center;">Saturday, the sixteenth of June</div><div style="text-align:center;">two thousand twelve</div><div style="text-align:center;">six o'clock</div><div style="text-align:center;">
    </div><div style="text-align:center;">Lexington Palace</div><div style="text-align:center;">Crest View, California</div>
  • Yeah I feel that way too and those were the lines I was having trouble deciding on.. So possibly this..


    God has led two lives
    to take one path


    Bride Name
    And
    Groom Name

    together with their parents
    request the pleasure of your company
    to share in the joy of their marriage

    on the sixteenth of June
    two thousand twelve
    at six o'clock in the evening.
    Lexington Palace
    770 Lexington Avenue
    Crest View, California

     

  • The only issue I'd have with "to share in the joy of their marriage" is that it doesn't make me think of a wedding - it makes me think you're already married. But others might disagree with me. 

    A few things: I'd say "Saturday, the sixteenth of June" rather than just the date. Also, you only need to say "six o'clock". You don't need the word "at" or the words "in the evening", because no one will think your wedding is at 6am. Don't put a period at the end of that line. 
  • Okay I think i'm going to go with your exact wording! Thank you:)
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