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XP Invitation Wording

We have had some discussion on the wording... and I knew right away I would ask the knot ladies for the best advice! I want it to be casual and to sound like us (which is not "traditonal"), but still sound correct.

Please join us for an evening of

love and laughter,

friendship and family as

Leah ****

&

Christopher****

Celebrate the union of their two hearts

and give eachother the promise

of sharing a lifetime.

My questions is in the second/third line.

Should it be love, laughter, friendship and family OR

love and laughter, friendship and family?

I know the second might not be gramtically correct, but I don't know if I like the "list" feeling I get with the first way.

At the end of the day I really know nothing of spelling and grammer (as you can see from this post alone). I saw the wording in another invitation once and really loved it, but now I am being told I have too many ands...

Hope this all makes sense in what I am asking.

Thanks!!

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Re: XP Invitation Wording

  • I'd go with "love, laughter, friendship, and family." The other way struck me as odd as soon as I read it, before I even got to your question.
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  • wrigleyvillewrigleyville member
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    edited May 2013
    I agree with Krizzo. I know it "feels" wrong to you, but it really is proper to list it with commas. 

    "Love and laughter" aren't a unit like "spaghetti and meatballs", so they require a comma.
  • I agree with @Krizzo17

     

    Also, the "please join us" rubs me the wrong way, as invitations should always be issued in the third person.  You use the third person from there on (stating names, "their hearts") so if "us" isn't you and your FI who is it? KWIM? 

     

    Please join

    Leah ****

    &

    Christopher****

    for an evening of

    love, laughter, friendship and family

    as they celebrate the union of their hearts

    and give each other the promise

    of sharing a lifetime.

  • Thanks for the help on this. I will be rewording it! :)
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