Help me word this

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I am putting a little welcome piece of paper in the OOT bags.

I am trying to put a sentence in there saying that we wll be eating brunch at this place and time the morning after, and would loveto see you, but we are not paying for you.... Help me...I keep re-writing it over and over again and it just sounds so awkward

The newlyweds will be eating brunch at 10am on Sunday morning at Ingredients in the lobby of the Westin. Stop by if you would like to say goodbye before we head out for our honeymoon!

LoveMuffins

I would say "having brunch"
and "feel free to stop by"
if it's an all you can eat brunch type thing  and you're looking for company, i might also say something like, "brunch is x amount if you'd like to join us"

looks good though

SirJuliusVonHaast

I'm not sure how many guests you have, but it might be less awkward to spread this by word of mouth, than to write it out. 

aragx6

I would go with:

The newlyweds will be having brunch Sunday at 10 a.m. at Ingredients, located in the Westin lobby. Please feel free to join and say goodbye before they head out on their honeymoon!

I get why you used "stop by" because you're trying to show that you're not paying, but I also think it comes across as they're not supposed to stay and eat if they wish.

aggiebug

oh gosh. I have been struggling with this same thing. 

I think word of mouth is what we figured would work best for us.  but I think if you add "feel free to stop by" it would get the point across just fine.

Kate61487

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[QUOTE]I would go with: The newlyweds will be having brunch Sunday at 10 a.m. at Ingredients, located in the Westin lobby. Please feel free to join and say goodbye before they head out on their honeymoon! I get why you used "stop by" because you're trying to show that you're not paying, but I also think it comes across as they're not supposed to stay and eat if they wish.
Posted by aragx6[/QUOTE]

This.  Both with the "join" and with "their honeymoon"

MiddlesexFells

This may be totally lame, but could you include a copy of the brunch menu (or maybe a screenshot from an online menu or something) from the hotel/restaurant, which would include prices?

I think "join us (or them)" sounds more like you're going to pay than "stop by" does.  Join us makes me think it's a hosted party.

MobKaz

Ingredients, located in the lobby of The Westin Hotel, offers a Sunday brunch for $$.00 per person.  We plan on breakfasting there at 10:00 am, just prior to departing for our honeymoon.  Hopefully we will have a chance to see some of you there before we leave.

Brandiewine11

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[QUOTE]Ingredients, located in the lobby of The Westin Hotel, offers a Sunday brunch for $$.00 per person.  We plan on breakfasting there at 10:00 am, just prior to departing for our honeymoon.  Hopefully we will have a chance to see some of you there before we leave.
Posted by mobkaz[/QUOTE]

<div>While I'm not entirely comfortable mentioning prices, I think this is better than even "stop by" because some people will not understand the nuance and assume you are paying. I got an invite with something similar ("please RSVP if you'd like to join the B&G for sunday brunch, it is $25/person) and I appreciated the warning so we can make sure to bring enough cash to cover it.</div>

PirateintheSky

It may just be me, but if I recieved an invite to breakfast the morning after the wedding I wouldn't assume that it was paid for.  This being said, I don't think you have to specify price in order for them to think that thier food is on their dime. Also, please don't refer to yourselfs as the newlyweds and then say our. 

Try this:

The newlyweds will be having brunch at 10am on Sunday morning at Ingredients, located in the Westin lobby.  They would love to see you there and say goodbye before thier honeymoon.

I know its not very formal, but it isn't as implicatory as "join us" and isn't as meaningless as "stop by".