Invitation Wording- Please Help!

yeehawdani

I am lost.  I can't figure out good wording for my wedding invitations.  A little back ground: my parents are divorced not remarried, want to include grooms parents (but not up top) and it is a Catholic wedding.  Here is what I have so far:

Ms. Anne Smith Parker
Mr. John Michael Parker
request the honour of your presence
at the Nupital Mass uniting their daughter
Savannah Marie
and
Mr. Daniel Edward Jones
son of Mr. and Mrs. Paul Edward Jones
in the Sacrament of Holy Matrimony
Saturday, the first of May
Two thousand and ten
at three o'clock in the afternoon
St. Catherines Cathderal

My main concerns:
-Does it flow well?  Does the "son of" line with the "in the Sacrament of" line sound okay/flow well together?
-Am I supposed to leave out the Mr. in front of his name since his parents are listed?
-Grammatical Errors

** If anyone has ANY suggestions or answers I would appreciate it sooooooooooooo much! Thanks!!!!

Annie_Warbucks

Just because it is a Catholic wedding does not mean you have to use special wording. You can use the traditional wording if you would prefer. 

However, if you stick to the more unique wording: 

--I would leave out the Mr. in front of your FI's name.

 --I would also take out the "in the sacrament of holy matrimony" line. It doesn't flow right and saying that it is a nuptial mass is clear enough. 

--- "St. Catherines Cathedral" does not make sense. You need to spell out "Saint" and it would have to be either "Saint Catherine's Cathedral" or "Saint Catherine Cathedral."

---- you need to include the city and state (spelled out) under the name of the church. 

kristinanddan

- I wouldn't include the Mr. before your FI's name

- Saint should be spelled out, like pp said, along with the city and state of the cathedral

- I had to put "at the Nuptial Mass uniting their daughter" on two lines because it was too long and went too close to the borders on our invite. Keep this in mind, and definitely check the proof of your invite if you're ordering them.

yeehawdani

thank you very much for the advice.

megandjay

As PP said, and...

Two Thousand Ten (no 'and').

You probably don't have to say 'in the afternoon'.

squirrly

What you've got works, but drop the title for your FI.

Just for reference for others:  if you are having a full mass you SHOULD say so on your invite.  There are many people in the world who are NOT Catholic and are uncomfortable attending a full mass.  At least clue them in.