Critique my Invite & Response Wording

stace1814

How do these sound?

Bride
and
Groom
together with their parents
request the honour of your presence
at their marriage on
Saturday, the eighteenth of September
Two Thousand and Ten
Venue Name
City/State

Reception to follow


Response Card


The favour of a reply
is requested before the eighteenth of August

Number attending _______
       Not attending _______

Please indicate name below meal choice

Filet Mignon & Shrimp  Chicken Piccata  Sole & Crabmeat
_________________  _____________  _____________
_________________  _____________  _____________

Child meals will be Chicken Fingers & French Fries
Number of Children Attending ________

quotequeen

Is the ceremony in a house of worship?  If not it is technically improper to use "honour of your presence," you are supposed to use "pleasure of your company."

What if there are more than two people who want a particular dish?

JanoBean75

Bride
and
Groom
together with their parents
request the pleasure of your company (non-church wedding)
at their marriage on
Saturday, the eighteenth of September
Two thousand and ten
Venue Name (non church?)
City, State (spell out the state)

Reception to follow


Response Card


The favour of a reply
is requested before the eighteenth of August

Number attending _______
       Not attending _______

Please initial below meal choice

Filet Mignon & Shrimp  Chicken Piccata  Sole and Crabmeat
_________________  _____________  _____________
_________________  _____________  _____________

Child meals will be Chicken Fingers and French Fries
Number of Children Attending ________

banana468

Personally, I dislike it when I see that the bride and groom are hosting the event with their parents but they don't put "Together with their parents" as the first line.    It grates on me just as phrasing like, "I and John went to the movies, " does.

Also, aside from the use of 'honour of your presence' vs. 'pleasure of your company', what time is the wedding?  Your guests aren't going to show up at 6 AM to block the day.

JenniferC2010

You forgot the time of the ceremony

stace1814

I can't believe I forgot the ceremony time.  Would "at half after four o'clock in the afternoon" work for that?  Thanks for all of the replies, I asked because I wasn't sure and now I know.