March 2013 Weddings

Invitation Wording?

So I have been working on our invites, and I'm so lost with the wording. FI and I each have a 5 year old child from previous relationships, so I was thinking something like this
Along with their parents and children
Denise
&
Brady 
joyfully invite you to share in our celebration of love and commitment
as two families become one.

I finished the RSVP cards and I'm really happy with them! I'll post pics when they come. The price of my invites went down 50% today so I'm hoping to order them since I have a coupon Groupons to use up soon! 


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Re: Invitation Wording?

  • I like it! The only thing I'd personally do differently is maybe say "together with their families" just because it's less wordy. That's just my opinion though, it doesn't sound bad the way you have it!
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  • Thanks Jenni, You don't think then we're saying families too much? 

    Together with their families
    Denise
    &
    Brady 
    joyfully invite you to share in our celebration of love and commitment
    as two families become one.


    Maybe I should just skip that first line all together? 


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  • Ohh that's a good point. Hmm. I'll get back to you if I think of something!
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  • I would skip the first part. Just put as two families become one :D
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